Dearest Juan part 5
Penpals as children find love as adults2 total reviews
Comment from JSD
Even though I haven't reviewed every one, I have continued to follow this story and really enjoying it. The prison scenes are pretty rough but the love they feel for each other shines through and gives the readers hope. Well done on this excellent creation.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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Even though I haven't reviewed every one, I have continued to follow this story and really enjoying it. The prison scenes are pretty rough but the love they feel for each other shines through and gives the readers hope. Well done on this excellent creation.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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Thank you
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well here we have the friendship from the other perspective of Juan inside prison, aiming now to keep this communication going. There is a lot of insight into the prison system which brings this story to life. I think the danger is, sometimes, that all the dialogue can be a bit too lengthy and incoherent and, ideally, I would cut it back a bit to sustain interest on the part of the reader. Also some 'gremlins' in the text after "Hi my love" But an interesting read with potential as long as some kind of plot can emerge soon. Thanks for sharing Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Well here we have the friendship from the other perspective of Juan inside prison, aiming now to keep this communication going. There is a lot of insight into the prison system which brings this story to life. I think the danger is, sometimes, that all the dialogue can be a bit too lengthy and incoherent and, ideally, I would cut it back a bit to sustain interest on the part of the reader. Also some 'gremlins' in the text after "Hi my love" But an interesting read with potential as long as some kind of plot can emerge soon. Thanks for sharing Debbie
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you
