The Boastful Boy
Consequences when caught in a storm. (50-word story)19 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
Man that Dribble Flash Fiction contest is chalked full of good entries.
Yours is very good! Great punchline!!!
Most enjoyable, indeed. Good luck!
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Man that Dribble Flash Fiction contest is chalked full of good entries.
Yours is very good! Great punchline!!!
Most enjoyable, indeed. Good luck!
D
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
lol That's funny! Within the Dribble format, you were about right tell an excellent story for the challenge. You used good imagery and descriptive words. Your dialogue was well written and surprising to the reader. I enjoyed reading this.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
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lol That's funny! Within the Dribble format, you were about right tell an excellent story for the challenge. You used good imagery and descriptive words. Your dialogue was well written and surprising to the reader. I enjoyed reading this.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
Comment from LJbutterfly
Haha! I appreciate the creativity of this short story with your clever 'play on words' ending, more than I'm concerned about the fictitious boy making it to shore. You've written another imaginative flash fiction. Best wishes in the contest.
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Haha! I appreciate the creativity of this short story with your clever 'play on words' ending, more than I'm concerned about the fictitious boy making it to shore. You've written another imaginative flash fiction. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
Comment from Bill Schott
This dribble, The Boastful Boy, has the proper word count and finds the fateful moment when one's alligator mouth has over-reached his tweety-bird butt.
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This dribble, The Boastful Boy, has the proper word count and finds the fateful moment when one's alligator mouth has over-reached his tweety-bird butt.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
Comment from Mia Twysted
I had a little giggle at the end which made me feel bad for the two characters that seem to be in so much trouble. I am left wondering if they made it ashore.
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I had a little giggle at the end which made me feel bad for the two characters that seem to be in so much trouble. I am left wondering if they made it ashore.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
Comment from Daylily
So funny! Shows how poor communication can leave someone waterlogged and even worse. This is a strong entry in the Dribble Flash Fiction contest. Sincere best wishes!
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So funny! Shows how poor communication can leave someone waterlogged and even worse. This is a strong entry in the Dribble Flash Fiction contest. Sincere best wishes!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
Comment from Wendyanne
Lol what a funny ending though bot funny for the boy concerned in this amusing little piece of flash fiction. I wasn't expecting that ending. I enjoyed reading this.
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Lol what a funny ending though bot funny for the boy concerned in this amusing little piece of flash fiction. I wasn't expecting that ending. I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
Comment from BethShelby
It sounds like he's in trouble if he can swim at all. Flounders do swim but he might not have known that since the can lay flat in the mud. I guess the word flounder means to to struggle. Nice dribble in fifty words. It doesn't pay to brag.
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It sounds like he's in trouble if he can swim at all. Flounders do swim but he might not have known that since the can lay flat in the mud. I guess the word flounder means to to struggle. Nice dribble in fifty words. It doesn't pay to brag.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
Comment from Mary Vigasin
His boasting caught up with him at a most inopportune time! Your "flounder" pun is great and fun even in a dramatic setting.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
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His boasting caught up with him at a most inopportune time! Your "flounder" pun is great and fun even in a dramatic setting.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
Comment from Debra White
Hello LisaMay :)
I enjoyed reading your flash fiction.
Love the way that you brought the scene to life in just a few words and your play on words at the end was perfect.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
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Hello LisaMay :)
I enjoyed reading your flash fiction.
Love the way that you brought the scene to life in just a few words and your play on words at the end was perfect.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
