Get Off Your Rump
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Comment from Wendyanne
This is quite a well written little poem in which you have incorporated the word RUN as per contest requirements. "Eat not your bun." Love that lol. Good luck with this.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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This is quite a well written little poem in which you have incorporated the word RUN as per contest requirements. "Eat not your bun." Love that lol. Good luck with this.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your encouragement,
Comment from Eleri
This poem starts well but I think that you are supposed to have all four lines rhyming. Also, I do not really understand your second line because of the way you have rearranged the words.
Eleri
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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This poem starts well but I think that you are supposed to have all four lines rhyming. Also, I do not really understand your second line because of the way you have rearranged the words.
Eleri
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Oh, did the instructions state or imply that all four lines need to rhyme? Or is this a rule about all poems? And the instructions appear to be gone, by now. It looks like, well, I do not really know. And "Do not eat your bun" appeared clumsy to me, Now what? Thanks for challenging me.
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I would have said 'don't eat your bun' as that is more straight forward English - that's all
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I don't necessarily go with "straight forward English" if, for example, I wish to capture readers' attention, but yes, I don't wish to confuse readers. Thanks,
