Thanksgiving Turkey
Eat the turkey!2 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is a wonderful Thanksgiving piece and a great entry for the Eyes of a Child Contest!
Suggestion:
This is a 113 word paragraph. Paragraph breaks give your readers subconscious mental breaks. Necessary to keep them engaged. Grammatically, only one person should dialogue in any given paragraph.
So when dad starts to speak that gives you a great naturally start for a new paragraph.
My two cents.
Regardless, fun read!
D
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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This is a wonderful Thanksgiving piece and a great entry for the Eyes of a Child Contest!
Suggestion:
This is a 113 word paragraph. Paragraph breaks give your readers subconscious mental breaks. Necessary to keep them engaged. Grammatically, only one person should dialogue in any given paragraph.
So when dad starts to speak that gives you a great naturally start for a new paragraph.
My two cents.
Regardless, fun read!
D
Comment Written 23-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your kind review and insight! Happy Thanksgiving!
Comment from créateur d'histoire
This was cute. Sometimes children innocuous questions carry with them more profound issues. Here it could be interpreted as a moral question of whether to eat living things and if non human beings have a conscienceless .Good Luck.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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This was cute. Sometimes children innocuous questions carry with them more profound issues. Here it could be interpreted as a moral question of whether to eat living things and if non human beings have a conscienceless .Good Luck.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Thank you! Happy Thanksgiving!
