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A Particular Friendship

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We meet Lizzy who has just come out of the convent

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Comment from Nicki Nance
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You put me right in the action with this chapter. The children are a well developed couple of risk-takers. The bathroom scene was fun. Meeting in the closet was sweet and intimate. Thanks for such a refreshing story. We need a little literary respite in these dark times.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
    Thank you for your delightful review. If want to glance at the previous chapters, feel free with no need for a review. Just enjoy.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Wow, you and your siblings never seemed to be short of imaginative play activities. And how great that was! Never having electronics or toys placed in front of you but, instead, having to create your own entertainment and adventure. A lovely, heart-warming chapter, Liz! No wonder your posts always ooze that same imagination and depth of thinking. Thanks for sharing Debbie

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
    Thank you for your delightful review. I'm glad you are enjoying my autobiography.
Comment from Wendyanne
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I enjoyed reading your biographical story about childhood days very much. It sounds like you had a lovely childhood. Thank you for sharing your delightful story with us.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 05-Dec-2023
    Thank you for your involved review. If you'd like to read any previous chapters, feel free without needing a review. Just enjoy.
Comment from eliz100
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This sounds like a happy childhood. Fighting with your siblings. The whole locked bathroom seemed a little torturous for the one locked out. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
    Thank you for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed my chapter.
Comment from BethShelby
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It sounds like the three of you had wonderful times together. I would have loved having siblings once I got past my jealousy that comes along with being an only child. I thought i wanted siblings but even anyone in the family over some child other than me the green-eyed monster showed her fact. I enjoyed reading this.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
    Thank you for your involved review. Sadly, my sister came into this lifetime with a chip on her shoulder against me, probably from some past life stuff. She was 5 years younger and was our father's mascot. We never in our 71 years had a decent experience. We make nice on facebook every few months at my initiation. I forget I have a sister but have many who are like a sister. I guess we make our own family. My brother got hit by a car on his bike when he was 40, so for 35 years, I've had a stranger for my brother. We are as close as we can be, all things considered. He calls me about 7 times a day. I do not answer the call many times. Thank you for sharing your wishes.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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You have a good recall. The changing of font size and spacing is confusing and gave me a headache. I have been sleeping like you wouldn't believe lately. I had been on a very prolific streak for a while, but it is hibernation time. Good writing. Karen

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
    Thank you for your review. I've also been sleeping a little better, 3 hours at a time and sometimes 4 which is a treat. I'm glad you are getting respite.
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 04-Dec-2023
    Have a good week. Karen
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
    You also
Comment from lyenochka
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This was a cute remembrance of childhood days. But I really feared for your brother being locked out of the bathroom. What if he got a kidney infection? Man, you were one tough cookie to keep roughhousing and ripping those stitches!
Suggestions:
he got a stigmatism (astigmatism ?)
No Annie Oakly for me, (Oakley for me; - a semicolon would be better since this is followed by a full sentence.)

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
    Thank you for your alert review. I have attended to your observations.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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You and your brother got along better than me and my sister. We've only become friends since our mother died twenty-five years ago. I hope you have been friends as adults. I am surprised you two both lived to grow up as you seemed to take a lot of chances.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
    Thank you for your involved review. It is a wonder we are both alive. He did almost die in a bicycle accident when he was a week short of 40, where he also got head injured. I will be telling more about this later on. My sister & I still don't get along.
Comment from aryr
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That was definitely a great continuation chapter, Liz. You felt safe because it was were you could feel safe. I am surprised that little Nicky was the cause of all your injuries, including the great bathroom escapade. The creation of all of your activities were the downfall of those activities. The treats. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
    Thank you for your involved review.
reply by aryr on 03-Dec-2023
    You are so welcome, Liz.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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This does sound like you had a pretty normal and safe childhood. All children should have this type of childhood. I fear today's children are missing out on so much honest play that they will suffer from it. Thank you for sharing this with us.

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 Comment Written 02-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
    Thank you for your involved review.