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His wife of forty years is on her deathbed Now19 total reviews
Comment from gramalot8
Thsnk you for your touching poem about remembering the past,
It's hard to lose a spouse, especially when you've been married for so many years.
Your poem was beautiful and I wish you well in the love contest.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thsnk you for your touching poem about remembering the past,
It's hard to lose a spouse, especially when you've been married for so many years.
Your poem was beautiful and I wish you well in the love contest.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thanks, gram.Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written, and I enjoyed listening to it very much. You have worded it in such a way that it tugs at the heart. I wish for you a very merry Christmas, and a most happy and prosperous new year.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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This is very well written, and I enjoyed listening to it very much. You have worded it in such a way that it tugs at the heart. I wish for you a very merry Christmas, and a most happy and prosperous new year.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Pat. Merry nChristmas to you and your family.
Comment from Sally Law
Welcome to FanStory, Norm Valentine from Minnesota! What a delight to read your beautiful love poetry today. Most noticeable was the free verse style which is refreshing on this site. Positively dazzling!
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Welcome to FanStory, Norm Valentine from Minnesota! What a delight to read your beautiful love poetry today. Most noticeable was the free verse style which is refreshing on this site. Positively dazzling!
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Sally. Merry Christmas.
Comment from JSD
A sad poem, but the way you have focused on time with your 'Now' and 'Then' is most effective. Excellent free verse and a great take on the prompt. Good luck with this. x
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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A sad poem, but the way you have focused on time with your 'Now' and 'Then' is most effective. Excellent free verse and a great take on the prompt. Good luck with this. x
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thanks, J. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a touching free-write filled with tender remembrances Norman and I enjoyed your warm and loving words. I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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This is a touching free-write filled with tender remembrances Norman and I enjoyed your warm and loving words. I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thanks again, Dolly. Always like hearing from you. Merry Christmas.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
That is definitely love for sure. Someone who's about to leave the world and I need you the most. That is truly love. And a dog that you love the car just is hard when they're gone. I assume this for someone you loved in your life. My condolences to you and thank you for writing this lovely poem. I've seen the old issues with grammar sentence structure spelling. That'sthetics it's a great submission best of luck to you. I hope you have a wonderful night!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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That is definitely love for sure. Someone who's about to leave the world and I need you the most. That is truly love. And a dog that you love the car just is hard when they're gone. I assume this for someone you loved in your life. My condolences to you and thank you for writing this lovely poem. I've seen the old issues with grammar sentence structure spelling. That'sthetics it's a great submission best of luck to you. I hope you have a wonderful night!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Lea. Love for sure. Glad you liked it. Merry Christmas.
Comment from Yusita
This is a beautiful poem that touches the heart with bittersweetness. It perfectly embodies what is many times experienced by those in such a situation...in those moments so many thoughts invade our mind... random memories and details that we are many times afraid to forget... In any case, a truly lovely piece. The last "then" was a final tug at the heart that almost pulled a tear out--one word but it's so powerful and evokes so much feeling. Beautifully done!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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This is a beautiful poem that touches the heart with bittersweetness. It perfectly embodies what is many times experienced by those in such a situation...in those moments so many thoughts invade our mind... random memories and details that we are many times afraid to forget... In any case, a truly lovely piece. The last "then" was a final tug at the heart that almost pulled a tear out--one word but it's so powerful and evokes so much feeling. Beautifully done!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Yusita. Yes, afraid to forget.
Comment from Navada
This is a really beautiful tribute and I particularly liked the way your narrators' anecdotes were linked through the connection of Then and Now, allowing us as readers to travel back and forth. This is such a poignant piece and I really liked the fact that you allowed room for the reader to enter in and do the work emotionally for ourselves. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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This is a really beautiful tribute and I particularly liked the way your narrators' anecdotes were linked through the connection of Then and Now, allowing us as readers to travel back and forth. This is such a poignant piece and I really liked the fact that you allowed room for the reader to enter in and do the work emotionally for ourselves. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Navada. Happy to hear you enjoy this. Merry Christmas.
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Thank you so much for your reviewing vote - very generous of you! :)
Comment from June Sargent
You do have a way with words that tug at the heartstrings. This poem is relatable, as it highlights how we hold onto the past when the future is uncertain and a bit frightening. Life without her...after 40 years. Beautiful sentiments. Love with the ecstasy of joy and the agony of loss.
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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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You do have a way with words that tug at the heartstrings. This poem is relatable, as it highlights how we hold onto the past when the future is uncertain and a bit frightening. Life without her...after 40 years. Beautiful sentiments. Love with the ecstasy of joy and the agony of loss.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023
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Thanks, June. Appreciate your words. Merry Christmas.
Comment from Jacob1395
I could really feel the emotion in your writing and I thought it flowed really well. You did a brilliant job of keeping me engaged and I really enjoyed reading it. An excellent piece.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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I could really feel the emotion in your writing and I thought it flowed really well. You did a brilliant job of keeping me engaged and I really enjoyed reading it. An excellent piece.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thank, Jacob for the kind review.
