Last of its Days
mid-fall2 total reviews
Comment from Norm Valentine
Very nice overall. I would have given this five stars except for a couple of lines.
The last line of the third stanza seems a little too contrived. Could easily be be edited to read more smoothly.
Do like the "Where the Sun is more crystal than hot summer haze" line and the overall flow.
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Very nice overall. I would have given this five stars except for a couple of lines.
The last line of the third stanza seems a little too contrived. Could easily be be edited to read more smoothly.
Do like the "Where the Sun is more crystal than hot summer haze" line and the overall flow.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very descriptive writing that you have done about fall. I enjoyed listening to it very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful day and may your Christmas be bright and merry. Patricia
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This is a very descriptive writing that you have done about fall. I enjoyed listening to it very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful day and may your Christmas be bright and merry. Patricia
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
