Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Flaming lips and desire can be the culprits in this poem. A lot of times we wish to read the words in a fiction novel and lots of times we feel the writer's flame ignite.

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023

Thanks.

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Hot times, in your four corner room, feeling the heat of this particular illustrated moment. I found your statement captivating, able to grab my attention. Merry Christmas.

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023

Thank you so much for your feedback!

Comment from T B Botts

Excellent

Hello Navada,
wonderful job putting the passion of the moment in one sentence. No doubt they've reached the point of no return. Let passion run it's course and hang on. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023

Thanks so much, Tom! :)

Comment from Aussie

Excellent

Well done with your one-liner. Fire, fire their pants on fire! Well written, well said. It's not easy to express emotions with typewritten words. Yours is a meaty subject, BBQ heat where the food of love doth meet. K xx

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023

Very nice - thanks! :)

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Very appropriately presented with a red background! Your theme is one which says it all in one kind but can definitely be expanded on and developed in subsequent contests. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

Thanks very much, Wendy. xx

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

The smoldering eyes do evoke images of a fiery passion. You've done well in highlighting the emotions in just one line. Great response to the challenge.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

Thank you so much! :)

Comment from Lisasview

Excellent

Wow wee... Navada... from your very first word to your last you had my attention...and the red back ground...amazing!!
I am so into metaphors so this poem of yours is right up my alley.
Lisa

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

Thank you so much! :)

Comment from Rachelle Allen

Excellent

Woo-woo! Hubba, hubba!! This one smokes and smolders like the beginning of a five-alarm blaze! I need to go take a cold shower and then go to Confession...AND I'M JEWISH!!!

I can see this one boogie-ing down to the Winner's Circle for SURE!! Good luck!
xoxo

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

HA! Thank you for your unfailing positivity - it always gives me a lift! :)

Comment from JSD

Excellent

I'm glad that rather than make it one line, you have created a haiku with an extra syllable. This works really well and the story and imagery are most effective. Well done!

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

Thanks so much! xx

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This presentation for the fire metaphor contest certainly suggests that the unnamed couple certainly ought to be posted with consumer awareness warning signs.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023

HA! What great feedback! Thank you! :)