Passion's Flames
The fiery spark of love12 total reviews
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Eugene this one is gorgeous! You have such a sensitive mind and heart it comes out in your poetry combined with your great talent You've got wonderful magic! A very nice entry and a contender for sure. I hope you have the wonderful holiday and a great new year too!
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Eugene this one is gorgeous! You have such a sensitive mind and heart it comes out in your poetry combined with your great talent You've got wonderful magic! A very nice entry and a contender for sure. I hope you have the wonderful holiday and a great new year too!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2023
Comment from karenina
I've seen a couple of entries using passion as a metaphor. In most of them the word "fire" is included, so I'm unclear. I asked on a thread in the contest entry "area" -- You've written a fine metaphor without the use of the word "fire" for sure!
Karenina
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I've seen a couple of entries using passion as a metaphor. In most of them the word "fire" is included, so I'm unclear. I asked on a thread in the contest entry "area" -- You've written a fine metaphor without the use of the word "fire" for sure!
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
Comment from JSD
Lovely chasing of metaphor through this short form. Like a haiku with an extra syllable. Could you take it further and have 'glowing gaze' instead of 'enduring'?
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Lovely chasing of metaphor through this short form. Like a haiku with an extra syllable. Could you take it further and have 'glowing gaze' instead of 'enduring'?
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good title and poem to go with it, Eugene.
-Effective imagery and internal rhyme add to the
intensity of passion.
-I like the strong word choices with "Embers, ablaze, and ignite."
-Very good use of alliteration, as well.
-You do a good job showing the enduring nature of love.
-Good luck in the contest.
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-A good title and poem to go with it, Eugene.
-Effective imagery and internal rhyme add to the
intensity of passion.
-I like the strong word choices with "Embers, ablaze, and ignite."
-Very good use of alliteration, as well.
-You do a good job showing the enduring nature of love.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
Comment from Navada
I like your exploration of the prompt here, from "embers" to "hearts ablaze" to ignition. You've used this imagery well to describe the heat and passion of a physical relationship.
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I like your exploration of the prompt here, from "embers" to "hearts ablaze" to ignition. You've used this imagery well to describe the heat and passion of a physical relationship.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well I definitely think this fulfilled the brief with your metaphor of fire. I feel quite hot reading it:)) Some fine imagery enhanced by that internal rhyme. Well done and good luck, Eugene! Debbie
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Well I definitely think this fulfilled the brief with your metaphor of fire. I feel quite hot reading it:)) Some fine imagery enhanced by that internal rhyme. Well done and good luck, Eugene! Debbie
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
Comment from BethShelby
The words express passion and true love so would say this meet the requirement for this contest. You fired off a nice one line metaphor that had some internal rhyme.
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The words express passion and true love so would say this meet the requirement for this contest. You fired off a nice one line metaphor that had some internal rhyme.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
Comment from Wendyanne
This is a well written piece of metaphorical poetry in which you have described a fire as passionate love. You have used some vivid imagery in this short poem. Well done.
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This is a well written piece of metaphorical poetry in which you have described a fire as passionate love. You have used some vivid imagery in this short poem. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
Comment from Sally Law
You have a beautiful poem for the contest, Eugene. It's full of fire and passion. Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the upcoming contest.
Sally. :))
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You have a beautiful poem for the contest, Eugene. It's full of fire and passion. Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the upcoming contest.
Sally. :))
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your poem very much- poem is well written within the allowed number of syllables- to me - showing the normal transition of Passions Flame - embers ignite desire at first sight- leading to an enduring love - good job- AP
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I like your poem very much- poem is well written within the allowed number of syllables- to me - showing the normal transition of Passions Flame - embers ignite desire at first sight- leading to an enduring love - good job- AP
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
