Week Two 2023 - 2024
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Curious Desires"... Freeverse ...
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Comment from Lea Tonin1
Well that's pretty cool and what a unique perspective and very different way of writing it quite enjoy looking at it too it's aesthetically pleasing the dark background with the lovely text choice makes it stand out very well. That sandwich is making me hungry though LOL. I enjoy your word choices in your sentence structure too I also see no issues with grammar or aesthetics a great submission I wish you best of luck I hope your Christmas was great and your New year's will be even better have a wonderful evening!
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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Well that's pretty cool and what a unique perspective and very different way of writing it quite enjoy looking at it too it's aesthetically pleasing the dark background with the lovely text choice makes it stand out very well. That sandwich is making me hungry though LOL. I enjoy your word choices in your sentence structure too I also see no issues with grammar or aesthetics a great submission I wish you best of luck I hope your Christmas was great and your New year's will be even better have a wonderful evening!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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Thank you ... just let me know if they can be improved glad you can enjoy them ... all the best for new year !
Comment from Wendy G
Those delicatessens and similar specialty shops are seen more rarely now. You have described this one very well and shaped your lines perfectly. I particularly enjoyed the originiality of the first two lines.
Wendy
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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Those delicatessens and similar specialty shops are seen more rarely now. You have described this one very well and shaped your lines perfectly. I particularly enjoyed the originiality of the first two lines.
Wendy
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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Excellent much thank you's
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The delicatessen was always my favourite stall in the supermarket and yet these days it has lost its uniqueness due to shortages. We cannot get authentic greek yoghurt, or french cheeses now because of Brexit. The shelves are empty and we no longer welcome the delicate European flavours, I enjoyed your sentiment here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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The delicatessen was always my favourite stall in the supermarket and yet these days it has lost its uniqueness due to shortages. We cannot get authentic greek yoghurt, or french cheeses now because of Brexit. The shelves are empty and we no longer welcome the delicate European flavours, I enjoyed your sentiment here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Much appreciated ...
Comment from Navada
You made me hungry while reading this! Isn't it great how a well-loved local eatery can really worm its way into your heart and become an intrinsic part of the local tapestry. Thanks for the share.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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You made me hungry while reading this! Isn't it great how a well-loved local eatery can really worm its way into your heart and become an intrinsic part of the local tapestry. Thanks for the share.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Glad it wetted your appetite ...
Comment from Mintybee
I loved this look at a very specific place and experience. Turning a simple meal into a commentary on local cuisine was impressive. The short lines gave the reader the time to pause between thoughts and savour the poem, like one savours food. Well done.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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I loved this look at a very specific place and experience. Turning a simple meal into a commentary on local cuisine was impressive. The short lines gave the reader the time to pause between thoughts and savour the poem, like one savours food. Well done.
Mintybee
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Excellent glad you enjoyed ...
