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Comment from Julie Helms
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I'm sensing a little...frustration. This poem is an excellent way to shove all those emotions into a creative outlet. And you have done a fine job with that! I particularly like the imagery of pulling the wings off the fly. (Not that I'm into that, I could just strongly feel your words there). I do not know exactly what the object of your poem is,... Oh to be a fly on the wall. ;-)
Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
    Excellent much appreciate the read and fine examination ... keep them flying !
Comment from CrystieCookie999
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I am so glad you pointed out this was satirical. I am not entirely certain what it is satirizing, but if it is rap music, then it succeeds famously. If it's a political satire, I shan't ask who it refers to. It looks like you swept this fly off its feet, anyway. Thanks for posting.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
    It is a dedication to one of our lost poems it was left on thebrink though I know the author can do better so its not a personal or revenge attack ... enjoy !
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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This is excellent work. Your presentation is very good. This was so serious that it was humorous. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in readers. I enjoyed reviewing this.

Best wishes

Alex


 Comment Written 03-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
    Excellent much appreciate that you can enjoy my work !
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Your strong hatred of gnats is quite apparent in this piece. If the Buddhists are right, then you may return as one and roll around in self-loathing. Good thing they are wrong.

I am really not sure ð?¤" f gnats play a very important roll in the circle of life it I'm sure frogs like to eat them. Perhaps you can find a strong ally in frogkind.

Fun piece
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 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
    I like frogs ... nobody likes gnats ... glad you could enjoy thank you !
Comment from royowen
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I'm not sure who or what thisctirade is aimed at, but it must be something or someone that you don't particularly like, but I'm not sure it's a good way to start the new year, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
    Its a Black Crow Roy its not aimed at anyone in particular its to rebuke a piece of poetry ... so be careful !
reply by royowen on 31-Dec-2023
    Notes would be good.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
    Try my profile page you'll find it all there ... much appreciated !