City Crowd
A bustling market is just solitary confinement en masse9 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
This is so sad, but true. There is no lonelier place than a crowded city. Surrounded by souls encapsulated in cocoons, afraid to emerge. Or not knowing how to. Just going through the motions to survive. I enjoyed this piece of reality.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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This is so sad, but true. There is no lonelier place than a crowded city. Surrounded by souls encapsulated in cocoons, afraid to emerge. Or not knowing how to. Just going through the motions to survive. I enjoyed this piece of reality.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Wendy G
You have certainly captured the hustle and bustle of the market places, and of the self-focus of all the buyers (and sellers). Different and original. Well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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You have certainly captured the hustle and bustle of the market places, and of the self-focus of all the buyers (and sellers). Different and original. Well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Wendy! :)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
When reading this poem, I was relating to the hustle and bustle of Christmas shoppers or even Black Friday. Many people grab for products that are on sale when shopping. And we do run into people we know who are friends (at least we think so.) I've been doing a lot of shopping online, so I stay out of the crowd.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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When reading this poem, I was relating to the hustle and bustle of Christmas shoppers or even Black Friday. Many people grab for products that are on sale when shopping. And we do run into people we know who are friends (at least we think so.) I've been doing a lot of shopping online, so I stay out of the crowd.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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I do too! :)
Comment from Daylily
I used to live in NYC amidst all the hustle and bustle. On the sidewalks, people stare ahead without any of the interactive charm that comes from exchanging smiles. You are using a very interesting rhyme scheme for this excellent entry in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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I used to live in NYC amidst all the hustle and bustle. On the sidewalks, people stare ahead without any of the interactive charm that comes from exchanging smiles. You are using a very interesting rhyme scheme for this excellent entry in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from T.A. Walk
So a spieler would be like the card shark guy or the guy with the ball and cups in movies?? I have a pretty good vocabulary but you taught me something today :)
Cool piece, no SPAG critique. Good luck in your contest!!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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So a spieler would be like the card shark guy or the guy with the ball and cups in movies?? I have a pretty good vocabulary but you taught me something today :)
Cool piece, no SPAG critique. Good luck in your contest!!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! Yes, you've got the spieler pretty well defined. :)
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I dig it! I?ll have to use that one for my word of the day :)
Take care!!
Comment from Jacob1395
I think what your poem shows is that in a crowd, people are always hurrying, especially at a market, and no one stops really to take the time to speak to people. A well written piece. I thought your writing flowed well and I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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I think what your poem shows is that in a crowd, people are always hurrying, especially at a market, and no one stops really to take the time to speak to people. A well written piece. I thought your writing flowed well and I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Sugarray77
Your verse is very moving and portrays feelings of isolation and dread. Very moving and well-written. It's a good choice as an entry into this contest. Good luck.
Melissa
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Your verse is very moving and portrays feelings of isolation and dread. Very moving and well-written. It's a good choice as an entry into this contest. Good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much! :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I hate crowded places and always feel that they are threatening and a place where others can steal from you. Also there are aggressive sellers too. A fine free-verse, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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I hate crowded places and always feel that they are threatening and a place where others can steal from you. Also there are aggressive sellers too. A fine free-verse, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Dolly! Yes, I am with you. I much prefer online shopping these days when possible. :)
Comment from royowen
This is an unconventional rhyming poem, probably more in keeping with a free verse with rhyme, but the theme is good, the structure of the poem excellent, and it certainly was a rhyming poem, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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This is an unconventional rhyming poem, probably more in keeping with a free verse with rhyme, but the theme is good, the structure of the poem excellent, and it certainly was a rhyming poem, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Roy! I wondered whether people will be concerned with the fact that every line doesn't rhyme, but thought I would post it and find out. :)