Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Journey "This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
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Comment from thoughtgame2
Everything seems to be going well for you and your purpose in life sis. I'm glad I had a chance in my lifetime to cross paths with some as brilliantly displayed as you have been to me. I wish you the best always. The pen will keep us alive and well...great job.
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Everything seems to be going well for you and your purpose in life sis. I'm glad I had a chance in my lifetime to cross paths with some as brilliantly displayed as you have been to me. I wish you the best always. The pen will keep us alive and well...great job.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
Comment from EILEEN LAW
Your freinds here not you're freinds here.
Otherwise, it all seemed to be good after the next venture through the mountains and out to the valley and beyond to the cold cold city of cowtown
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Your freinds here not you're freinds here.
Otherwise, it all seemed to be good after the next venture through the mountains and out to the valley and beyond to the cold cold city of cowtown
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from Annmuma
As always, great writing that is a pleasure to read. The scenes are clearly set and the dialogue is always intriguing- it allows an insight into the characters. ann
I did see one spag --you're -- should be 'your' friends
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As always, great writing that is a pleasure to read. The scenes are clearly set and the dialogue is always intriguing- it allows an insight into the characters. ann
I did see one spag --you're -- should be 'your' friends
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
is it a planned thing that you're embarking on a new adventure at the same time that you're writing about another new adventure in your life? When I was in the navy, I never knew where I was going to be, although we didn't have to move a lot. In that case, I didn't have any choice in where I lived. I hope this new home finds you content and prosperous. I'd love to come fish for some bass. I have a fly rod that I bought when I was twelve, but seldom used. I used to order all the fishing catalogues that were advertised in outdoor magazines like Sports Afield and Outdoor Life, and I assumed the real fishermen all used Orvis fly rods, something I couldn't afford and wouldn't buy if I could. In any event, I'm looking forward to hearing how things are working out for you gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
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Hello Lea,
is it a planned thing that you're embarking on a new adventure at the same time that you're writing about another new adventure in your life? When I was in the navy, I never knew where I was going to be, although we didn't have to move a lot. In that case, I didn't have any choice in where I lived. I hope this new home finds you content and prosperous. I'd love to come fish for some bass. I have a fly rod that I bought when I was twelve, but seldom used. I used to order all the fishing catalogues that were advertised in outdoor magazines like Sports Afield and Outdoor Life, and I assumed the real fishermen all used Orvis fly rods, something I couldn't afford and wouldn't buy if I could. In any event, I'm looking forward to hearing how things are working out for you gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sounds like one of those big changes you talk about is coming now. I hope your move works out to be all that you hope it will be. But whether it does or not, that doesn't make it negative. You are moving and changing, and giving a new life a chance. There are never any guarantees on any thing, but never forget, sometimes we learn the most from mistakes and they can become the most rewarding. Thanks for sharing.
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Sounds like one of those big changes you talk about is coming now. I hope your move works out to be all that you hope it will be. But whether it does or not, that doesn't make it negative. You are moving and changing, and giving a new life a chance. There are never any guarantees on any thing, but never forget, sometimes we learn the most from mistakes and they can become the most rewarding. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
Comment from kahpot
Hi, Lea Tonin 1, I know I am way behind, but I thoroughly enjoyed your introduction about your future endeavors, and the story I read, I do hope your new adventure is exactly what you want, very well written, an excellent read****kahpot
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Hi, Lea Tonin 1, I know I am way behind, but I thoroughly enjoyed your introduction about your future endeavors, and the story I read, I do hope your new adventure is exactly what you want, very well written, an excellent read****kahpot
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
Comment from Tetamarina66
Piece of writing is nicely written. I like how your writing makes me visualize scenes you write about in your stories.
Hope your staying warm where you are
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Piece of writing is nicely written. I like how your writing makes me visualize scenes you write about in your stories.
Hope your staying warm where you are
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
Comment from Liz O'Neill
For some reason I am drawn to this intense sensory description: "Dark vehicle spins a crunching dance" I like your use of personification too it enhances the spirit. This is sweet: "chatting and laughing at the years memories as well as years past before I came along." i never put a disclaimer on my pages for my autobiography but you are right. But we lived it and here we are. I love that several seem to be writing their autobiography. You will be amazed when you are in your '70s looking at what you wrote, as with me I do not remember some of this stuff I wrote 20 plus years ago
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For some reason I am drawn to this intense sensory description: "Dark vehicle spins a crunching dance" I like your use of personification too it enhances the spirit. This is sweet: "chatting and laughing at the years memories as well as years past before I came along." i never put a disclaimer on my pages for my autobiography but you are right. But we lived it and here we are. I love that several seem to be writing their autobiography. You will be amazed when you are in your '70s looking at what you wrote, as with me I do not remember some of this stuff I wrote 20 plus years ago
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This reads pretty smoothly. I also wanted to add I sure like this line: Diamond soldiers blinked their staccato beat on the first part where it is poetry as an introduction.
Here is a suggestion on this sentence:
The early morning will see us on the road.
I think conditional tense is better here, because you are sort of reliving the events as you go, but they really have already happened, so:
The early morning would see us on the road.
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This reads pretty smoothly. I also wanted to add I sure like this line: Diamond soldiers blinked their staccato beat on the first part where it is poetry as an introduction.
Here is a suggestion on this sentence:
The early morning will see us on the road.
I think conditional tense is better here, because you are sort of reliving the events as you go, but they really have already happened, so:
The early morning would see us on the road.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this post about future change. Yes, things change, you had it very good with Mrs. B. That situation would be one that's hard to leave. I would have struggled with it. I hope leaving was a good thing. We'll see.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for sharing this post about future change. Yes, things change, you had it very good with Mrs. B. That situation would be one that's hard to leave. I would have struggled with it. I hope leaving was a good thing. We'll see.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you again Barbara I appreciate that like any decision in life there there's some good things and there's some not so good things however this gave me my oldest son who is a very successful man today. Thank you again for your time for your review and fine rating enjoy your afternoon I hope you're not too cold where you're at!
