2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from aryr
The picture was beautiful, Gypsy. I think your words were justifiable in that they were justifiable. The words were justifiable they showed that they were manageable. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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The picture was beautiful, Gypsy. I think your words were justifiable in that they were justifiable. The words were justifiable they showed that they were manageable. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
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You are so very welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this poem. It does seem that some women have men dropping over them. I have often wondered their secret. I have feeling it has to do with confidence more than anything else. This poem and the presentation are perfect. Thank you.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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I enjoyed reading this poem. It does seem that some women have men dropping over them. I have often wondered their secret. I have feeling it has to do with confidence more than anything else. This poem and the presentation are perfect. Thank you.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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You are right. Self confidence goes a long way... for women and for men.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
straight away, I'm enlightened by the introduction to the senses you so deftly compose.
Hmmm, somehow I feel like I should be apologising to Jade for wanting to taste those chocolate-dipped cherry lips. Are you trying to get me into trouble?:)
But it doesn't stop there... both lavender and jasmine. You have my olfactory senses reaching to capture the waft.
And lastly, the vision of the image you created within the 'golden sun' rising from a very interesting colour of eye... well, it just makes the whole picture more intriguing.
Stunning suite in a perfectly balanced trio of 3-6-9 syllable poem for this contest... all my very best wishes!
With our thoughts we create...
a magnetic attraction.
Warmest regards,
James.
******Stars Exceptional!!!!!!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Hi MariVal,
straight away, I'm enlightened by the introduction to the senses you so deftly compose.
Hmmm, somehow I feel like I should be apologising to Jade for wanting to taste those chocolate-dipped cherry lips. Are you trying to get me into trouble?:)
But it doesn't stop there... both lavender and jasmine. You have my olfactory senses reaching to capture the waft.
And lastly, the vision of the image you created within the 'golden sun' rising from a very interesting colour of eye... well, it just makes the whole picture more intriguing.
Stunning suite in a perfectly balanced trio of 3-6-9 syllable poem for this contest... all my very best wishes!
With our thoughts we create...
a magnetic attraction.
Warmest regards,
James.
******Stars Exceptional!!!!!!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Hehehe... I don't want to mess with your Jade the lioness. LoL
I try to use the senses to give a sense of visual moment in time.
I had fun writing this one. I blame my muse, she is very mischievous lol
Con cariņo
Marival
"Step away from the chocolate and no one gets hurt!"
Comment from Gloria ....
Very romantic with all the proper scents which are so important to a loving emotion.
Your presentation is perfect, as is your poem, so I wish you great luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Very romantic with all the proper scents which are so important to a loving emotion.
Your presentation is perfect, as is your poem, so I wish you great luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Gloria.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
auburn hair cascade - i think you need an S on cascade (auburn hair cascades)
other than that, and great imagistic poem with a great pic
you should put a small heart right under the crown! LOL!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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auburn hair cascade - i think you need an S on cascade (auburn hair cascades)
other than that, and great imagistic poem with a great pic
you should put a small heart right under the crown! LOL!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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I made some changes, it didn't sound right to me. I added your suggestions.
Thank you very much!
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
That's quite the portrait of a woman who has it all - beautiful and attracts all the guys. I wonder what lipstick tastes like chocolate-dipped cherries. Lol. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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That's quite the portrait of a woman who has it all - beautiful and attracts all the guys. I wonder what lipstick tastes like chocolate-dipped cherries. Lol. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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I made some changes, it didn't sound right to me.
Thank you very much, big sister
love
marival
Comment from GWHARGIS
I am loving the surge of love poems that are showing up on Fanstory lately. This one shows a lady who seems to be on a pedestal in the eyes of man. The queen of hearts is a very high title indeed. Great poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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I am loving the surge of love poems that are showing up on Fanstory lately. This one shows a lady who seems to be on a pedestal in the eyes of man. The queen of hearts is a very high title indeed. Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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I made some changes, it didn't sound right to me. I am always writing about love lol but Valentine day is coming maybe people are practicing.
Thank you very much!
Gypsy
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, Good descriptive writing. Men do get weak in the knees at the sight of a beautiful woman. It's in their DNA. They can't help themselves. Lol. Beautiful presentation. Gorgeous photo, gorgeous woman. Well done. Xo. M
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Hi Gypsy, Good descriptive writing. Men do get weak in the knees at the sight of a beautiful woman. It's in their DNA. They can't help themselves. Lol. Beautiful presentation. Gorgeous photo, gorgeous woman. Well done. Xo. M
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, my friend. It didn't sound right so I made some changes.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Gobsmakingly beautiful picture. Your poetry is lush and full of emotional life. This type of poem I have not seen before. You did it well. And, it is a very lovely crown. I bet it would fit my head just fine, it looks lightweight! haha Karen
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Gobsmakingly beautiful picture. Your poetry is lush and full of emotional life. This type of poem I have not seen before. You did it well. And, it is a very lovely crown. I bet it would fit my head just fine, it looks lightweight! haha Karen
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, my friend. It didn't sound right so I made some changes.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Douglas Goff
Playing with the Queen of Hearts. The joker is the only fool. Ha! That is what came into my head.
Great pictures as usual, my friend!
Good luck in the 3/6/9 competition. I think you will do well.
D
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Playing with the Queen of Hearts. The joker is the only fool. Ha! That is what came into my head.
Great pictures as usual, my friend!
Good luck in the 3/6/9 competition. I think you will do well.
D
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, my friend. It didn't sound right so I made some changes.
Gypsy hugs
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You improved upon an already great piece. I really like the 'her majesty line'. Damn you are such a talent!
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Thank you (((red face)))
