Be alert, chap...
Fill in the gap...2 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
Interesting post! I like that one can take away several meanings from this piece.
My take was to smile and the world smiles back, but be aware of the people who claim to laugh with you as they may very well be laughing at you. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Interesting post! I like that one can take away several meanings from this piece.
My take was to smile and the world smiles back, but be aware of the people who claim to laugh with you as they may very well be laughing at you. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Smile? Does that show weakness? Could someone take advantage of us? It might be a good idea to get to know the person or people with whom we are attempting to relate. I think trust needs to be earned. Thank you for wrestling with this poem. Best, back, too.
Comment from Frank Malley
I don't know what rules existed in this contest besides the limit of two lines. This mini-poem has ten syllables, and I suspect that's a specified limit or requirement. If so, it forgives a lot of sins, such as the meter in this piece - it's a got a 3/4 triplet based first line, which gets entirely discarded in line 2. Although, by varying the accents, I can make it work. "Be Alert, Chap..." seems to be a poem of advice for dating/mating-aged people.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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I don't know what rules existed in this contest besides the limit of two lines. This mini-poem has ten syllables, and I suspect that's a specified limit or requirement. If so, it forgives a lot of sins, such as the meter in this piece - it's a got a 3/4 triplet based first line, which gets entirely discarded in line 2. Although, by varying the accents, I can make it work. "Be Alert, Chap..." seems to be a poem of advice for dating/mating-aged people.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Whatever 'hidden' rules might exist, to that, I confess ignorance. I also confess ignorance to the "3/4 triplet" first and the 'whatever' second line. Still, I think smiling can be good, but being a "sap" tends not to be good. Thank you for caring and for sharing.