Broken soul
A short poem to link to darkness of the loneliness felt when5 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Firstly, welcome to to this site and community of writers and those aspiring to be very good at it. I like your rhyming poem and take on darkness, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
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Firstly, welcome to to this site and community of writers and those aspiring to be very good at it. I like your rhyming poem and take on darkness, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2024
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Excellent writing. It is full of good sensory words and vibrant imagery. You express how darkness spreads and is in different situations. Thank you for sharing this. Many writers will relate to this.
Best wishes,
Alex
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Excellent writing. It is full of good sensory words and vibrant imagery. You express how darkness spreads and is in different situations. Thank you for sharing this. Many writers will relate to this.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 03-Feb-2024
Comment from forestport12
Not sure if I'm reading into this...It felt like someone was left alone after a fight or a romance gone sour, and now the loneliness creeps in and every pitch of darkness or sound of silence is magnified. Excellent mood setting and unforced rhymes!
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Not sure if I'm reading into this...It felt like someone was left alone after a fight or a romance gone sour, and now the loneliness creeps in and every pitch of darkness or sound of silence is magnified. Excellent mood setting and unforced rhymes!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Even when we feel we have a loving relationship, we can sometimes feel loneliness, especially when there is some emotional distance between the couple. A poignant post for the contest and I wish you luck and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
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Even when we feel we have a loving relationship, we can sometimes feel loneliness, especially when there is some emotional distance between the couple. A poignant post for the contest and I wish you luck and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Congrats on your first milestone and welcome! Your verse certainly gives the sense of a pervasive sense of darkness as it creeps through your mind, echoing feelings of loneliness and silent solitude. In short, it's very atmospheric and evocative in it imagery. You've used a background colour of grey which is fitting for the theme but sometimes this makes reading difficult for some reviewers. Perhaps if you could have used a slightly larger font this might have improved the presentation and impact of the post (or even an image). But it's an excellent verse and a worthy contender. Good luck! Debbie
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Congrats on your first milestone and welcome! Your verse certainly gives the sense of a pervasive sense of darkness as it creeps through your mind, echoing feelings of loneliness and silent solitude. In short, it's very atmospheric and evocative in it imagery. You've used a background colour of grey which is fitting for the theme but sometimes this makes reading difficult for some reviewers. Perhaps if you could have used a slightly larger font this might have improved the presentation and impact of the post (or even an image). But it's an excellent verse and a worthy contender. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
