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We may find Happiness

Contest entry

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Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
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a beautfiul entry for the 3-6-9 poetry contest. I used to live next to a butterfly garden where thousand of butterflies flew free iside this domed area and vistors could come sit with them as long as they didn't try to touch them. They would land on our faces and arms and it was just magical. I like the photo and the colors you used. If I could make one suggestion it might be to change the font. It might just be me but I found it very difficult to read the font. Nicely written. Good luck.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
    I live in the Phoenix Arizona area and there is a butterfly garden like you describe fairly close to where I live. My daughter has been there and she said it is absolutely lovely. Thank you so much for your kind review. This actually won a prize in the contest.
reply by Marilyn Hamilton on 09-Mar-2024
    Congratulations on your win!
Comment from dragonpoet
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Hi Patricia,
What a nice poem. A butterfly is so beautiful and graceful. And its touch is magical and is a good metaphor for God's loving touch.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Have a great weekend.
Joan

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
    Thank you so much for the nice review. I appreciate it very much.
reply by dragonpoet on 16-Feb-2024
    Don't mention it, Patricia.
    Joan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this beautifully written contest entry with us. I enjoyed the entire presentation and want to wish you the best of luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
    Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate it very much. I wish you a very good day.
Comment from Treischel
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Beautiful thoughts in this skillfully written 3-6-9 formatted poem. The image is perfectly matched to the message given in three tiers. Best of luck in the contest. This is lovely.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
    Thank you for taking time to review my work is very much appreciate
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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What a beautiful poem about getting love from God via a butterfly's touch. I love your personification of the butterfly and its tough as a metaphor for God's love.

Good luck in the contest.

Excellent.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
    Thank you so much for reviewing my poem and thank you also for the six stars.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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In the summer, butterflies are everywhere and I love it when they land on me, I feel very lucky. I enjoyed your fine post Patricia, roll on the summer, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
    Thank you so much for your nice review. However, I did have to change it because it needed to be three stands as long and I did make the change so you might want to check it again.
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 05-Feb-2024
    Just perfect Patricia x
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 05-Feb-2024
    Just perfect Patricia x
Comment from BethShelby
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Is this something that is suppose to bring happiness. I think I've heard if one come to rest on you it is suppose to be a sign of good luck. In order for it to work, first you've got to believe this is possible and then you got to keep looking for the happiness or good luck.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
    Thank you so much for your nice review. You may want to go back and read this again because I hadn?t failed to see that it needed to be three stances long so I added two stances to it.
Comment from lyenochka
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This is a great beginning to your 3-6-9 poem, Patricia! I think you can add a little more as you need a total of three stanzas for the contest. Keep praising the Lord for all the blessings that He sends your way!

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
    Thank you for your kind and I appreciate you telling me that this was to be a three stands up poem. I had failed to see that in the rules. I did go back and change it and I hope you will enjoy the revised edition.
reply by lyenochka on 05-Feb-2024
    I LOVE your revision, Patricia! It feels complete and with a great spiritual message now!
Comment from jessizero
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This contest calls for a poem of three stanzas, and you have only written one. I hope you can add to it, because it's lovely. I'm not sure you need the comma before "in flight" either, but that could just be me. Thank you for sharing, nad best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
    Thank you for your nice review is very much appreciated
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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Excellent writing and rhyming. It is full of good emotion and imagery. The photo image supports your words well. Thank you for sharing this. I love butterflies! Many writers will enjoy this. I enjoyed reviewing it.

Best wishes!

Alexandra :)

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 Comment Written 05-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
    Thank you so much for this review I appreciate