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A hidden love3 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Congratulations on your you first milestone post and it's a contest entry also. You're very brave to try a contest immediately. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Congratulations on your you first milestone post and it's a contest entry also. You're very brave to try a contest immediately. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much! I love Fanstory and everyone is so amazing!
Comment from Amanda marchuk
The poem is a concise and evocative expression of a fleeting moment, displaying an element of mystery and allure. With brevity and simplicity, the poet captures the essence of a shy and elusive encounter, weaving a tapestry of imagination and desire.
The opening lines introduce the theme of shyness and intrigue, evoking a sense of anticipation for what is to come. The use of the verb "staring" suggests an intense and longing gaze, creating a sense of tension and curiosity.
The phrase "sneaky girl kisses" adds an element of playfulness and mischief to the poem. It hints at clandestine or secretive affection, making the reader further intrigued by the narrative. This simple phrase adds depth to the portrayal of the characters, leaving room for interpretation and personal connection.
The concluding line, "you're my unexpected fantasy," encapsulates the central theme of the poem. It conveys a sense of surprise and enchantment, as the object of desire becomes an unexpected source of daydreams and imaginative fantasies. This line adds a touch of romanticism and a hint of longing, leaving the reader with a lingering sensation of the elusive nature of love and desire.
Overall, this short and sweet poem effectively captures a momentary encounter, painting a vivid picture of a shy and mysterious relationship. The language and imagery are concise yet evocative, allowing the reader to delve into their own interpretations and emotions. The simplicity of the poem's structure adds to its allure, making it an enjoyable read that resonates with readers looking for a brief but captivating poetic experience.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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The poem is a concise and evocative expression of a fleeting moment, displaying an element of mystery and allure. With brevity and simplicity, the poet captures the essence of a shy and elusive encounter, weaving a tapestry of imagination and desire.
The opening lines introduce the theme of shyness and intrigue, evoking a sense of anticipation for what is to come. The use of the verb "staring" suggests an intense and longing gaze, creating a sense of tension and curiosity.
The phrase "sneaky girl kisses" adds an element of playfulness and mischief to the poem. It hints at clandestine or secretive affection, making the reader further intrigued by the narrative. This simple phrase adds depth to the portrayal of the characters, leaving room for interpretation and personal connection.
The concluding line, "you're my unexpected fantasy," encapsulates the central theme of the poem. It conveys a sense of surprise and enchantment, as the object of desire becomes an unexpected source of daydreams and imaginative fantasies. This line adds a touch of romanticism and a hint of longing, leaving the reader with a lingering sensation of the elusive nature of love and desire.
Overall, this short and sweet poem effectively captures a momentary encounter, painting a vivid picture of a shy and mysterious relationship. The language and imagery are concise yet evocative, allowing the reader to delve into their own interpretations and emotions. The simplicity of the poem's structure adds to its allure, making it an enjoyable read that resonates with readers looking for a brief but captivating poetic experience.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Oh my gosh! Thank you so much for the amazing review! This is my first time posting, so now am even more encouraged by your kind words!
Comment from jessizero
Your poem was sweet, and the font added to the overall feel of the poem. However, the contest called for a poem of three stanzas, and you have only written one. I hope you are able to add to it. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Your poem was sweet, and the font added to the overall feel of the poem. However, the contest called for a poem of three stanzas, and you have only written one. I hope you are able to add to it. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Oops! Thanks! I guess I missed that part. It is my first time posting.
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Welcome to FanStory! Everyone here is great. I hope you will have a wonderful time
