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Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
You have a dark sense of humor and I like that in a person. Loved this 100 word Dash. Now try reducing it down by 45 words and let's see what happens. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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You have a dark sense of humor and I like that in a person. Loved this 100 word Dash. Now try reducing it down by 45 words and let's see what happens. Nicely done.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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I don't need homework thanks. I appreciate the read. Not a lot of folks got the irony part at all.
Comment from Ric Myworld
As with most, we aren't will to put ourselves out for anyone unless there is something in it for us. But the good think about writing an eulogy is: they won't be asking you anything else. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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As with most, we aren't will to put ourselves out for anyone unless there is something in it for us. But the good think about writing an eulogy is: they won't be asking you anything else. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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The eulogy was for his mother so she lied her ass off. His butting into everyone's business became "he always offered his help", and so on. Lot's of people become decent nice humans upon death.
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Yes, them seem to become decent, but you and I know it's usually an act. LOL.
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She was writing the eulogy for his mother so, Him constantly butting into everyone's business becomes " he always offered help". His coming in early so he could snoop in people's desks becomes: His work ethic was strong. he was always the first through the door. And, so forth.
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The dead may not be able to complain, but their relatives will :-) Karen
Comment from jessizero
This was a cute (though somewhat dark) piece of flash fiction. I like how she ended up agreeing with him about life not being fair. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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This was a cute (though somewhat dark) piece of flash fiction. I like how she ended up agreeing with him about life not being fair. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much for the read and nice comments, Irony gets everyone at some point. Karen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Irony, indeed!
But, everyone in the office heard her though. - You need a comma in front of 'though'. As is, 'though' is a noun.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Irony, indeed!
But, everyone in the office heard her though. - You need a comma in front of 'though'. As is, 'though' is a noun.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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I fixed it, Thanks for the read and the edit. Karen
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hahahahahaha!!! Oh, my goodness, what a mean puddy-tat. We can think these things, but we really shouldn't say them.
Oh, the story? I am supposed to comment on the story in my review... Well, there's not a thing to change. It's hilarious. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Hahahahahaha!!! Oh, my goodness, what a mean puddy-tat. We can think these things, but we really shouldn't say them.
Oh, the story? I am supposed to comment on the story in my review... Well, there's not a thing to change. It's hilarious. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Yes, the poster is so hilarious.The story is the definition of Irony. I see you have 2 stories awaiting my attention. I will read them today.
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
So difficult to do this when you've been used to having far more scope for your stories. But you've done a great job here, Karen! The image is perfect, the story is well-constructed and the ending is an amusing twist on the subject of your disdain - life isn't fair at all! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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So difficult to do this when you've been used to having far more scope for your stories. But you've done a great job here, Karen! The image is perfect, the story is well-constructed and the ending is an amusing twist on the subject of your disdain - life isn't fair at all! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much for the read and the nice comments. 100 words!Yikes! It is tough. Karen
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Right. By her perspective it wasn't fair that she had to go to his funeral. She's a tad self centered, other than that.. This is well written with colorful descriptions and good imagery. It's relatable too and is a good story for the challenge. Best wishes!
Alex
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Right. By her perspective it wasn't fair that she had to go to his funeral. She's a tad self centered, other than that.. This is well written with colorful descriptions and good imagery. It's relatable too and is a good story for the challenge. Best wishes!
Alex
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Yep, she is self centered and demanding. It ism just desserts when she yells ar him for always saying life isn't fair, and then she says the same thing. Tanks for the read, and kind words.
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, no life doesn't seem fair at all, and it wasn't her fault he walked in the front of a bus, but she should have kept her yap shut. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Heh heh, no life doesn't seem fair at all, and it wasn't her fault he walked in the front of a bus, but she should have kept her yap shut. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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What goes around, comes around. I was always told that. And, don't put your foot in your mouth, it makes a sorry lunch. Thanks for the read and nice comments.
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Well done
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Thanks so much for your read.
Have a good weekend.
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Well done
Comment from Mia Twysted
There is a guilt to this piece as she had told him to "flake off and die." However, I don't think it is guilt over death as it is over everyone who heard the words and will associate that death with them for the rest of their life. I didn't connect to the character. They seemed very smug to me. I do understand their feeling of being mixed up after the events went down.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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There is a guilt to this piece as she had told him to "flake off and die." However, I don't think it is guilt over death as it is over everyone who heard the words and will associate that death with them for the rest of their life. I didn't connect to the character. They seemed very smug to me. I do understand their feeling of being mixed up after the events went down.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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I don't think any of the office people cared about him. They just heard the loud remark, and as you say, they will feel attached to it.