February Tornadoes
First time ever13 total reviews
Comment from Mintybee
Wow, that's scary. I hope you and your family are all okay. This poem conveys the fear and uncertainty well. I hope along with you that it's not something reoccurring.
Mintybee
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Wow, that's scary. I hope you and your family are all okay. This poem conveys the fear and uncertainty well. I hope along with you that it's not something reoccurring.
Mintybee
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
Comment from Yusita
Through this piece You powerfully convey the mayhem that the tornado left in its wake. Tornadoes are definitely to be feared and respected. Tornadoes in February. This weather is going crazy! Just glad you're all fine!
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Through this piece You powerfully convey the mayhem that the tornado left in its wake. Tornadoes are definitely to be feared and respected. Tornadoes in February. This weather is going crazy! Just glad you're all fine!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Well written story about a scary terrible event. The climate is surely changing in dramatic ways. I'm glad you and your family are safe. I hope rebuilding goes well and that people will pull together to conquer the crisis of new extreme weather. Best wishes!
Alex
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Well written story about a scary terrible event. The climate is surely changing in dramatic ways. I'm glad you and your family are safe. I hope rebuilding goes well and that people will pull together to conquer the crisis of new extreme weather. Best wishes!
Alex
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, February Tornadoes, presented with seven tercets, recounts the devastation during the month caused by the unprecedented presence of violent weather.
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This poem, February Tornadoes, presented with seven tercets, recounts the devastation during the month caused by the unprecedented presence of violent weather.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
Comment from XinaD
I appreciate environmental poetry. I think it's a great platform to educate people and raise awareness. You did an excellent job covering the anguish, the community spirit, the unanswered questions. The world is changing, thank you for bringing light to this topic in such a well-crafted manner. My thoughts go out to you all.
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I appreciate environmental poetry. I think it's a great platform to educate people and raise awareness. You did an excellent job covering the anguish, the community spirit, the unanswered questions. The world is changing, thank you for bringing light to this topic in such a well-crafted manner. My thoughts go out to you all.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds terrifying and I know you have some extreme weather over there. We have had high winds, but nothing compared to this experience. A vibrant poem full of action here, love your descriptions, love Dolly x
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This sounds terrifying and I know you have some extreme weather over there. We have had high winds, but nothing compared to this experience. A vibrant poem full of action here, love your descriptions, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
Comment from royowen
They can be pretty devastating alright, we can get storms, but never much worse than that, we are sheltered where we are, I will pray for you, beautifully written, my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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They can be pretty devastating alright, we can get storms, but never much worse than that, we are sheltered where we are, I will pray for you, beautifully written, my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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We usually don't get these either. At least not now. It should be snow, blizzards, extreme cold, but not this. I hope you continue to not get these kind of storms. Thanks for the great review :)
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I agree
Comment from teafor2
ExperiencingLiphe: Right out of the gate, your picture captures the atten-
tion of the reader(s). The very first line of verbiage describes a not so pretty trail negotiated by nature's combination of fieriest winds and rain.
Your narrative/list poem flows down the page citing things progressively getting worse...Finally, the storm is over...Sadly, what was once a well
kept/manicured community with upright structures have been waylaid & ravaged by a temporarily angry show of force by nature. Now, all mem-bers must set aside personal agendas and band together and share re-sources to put this community back into its presentable working order.
Poetess has put together a well done depiction of a first tornado ex-perience. However, there are a couple of items that need addressing: In
line #3, it's should be its; line #4. Devistion should be Devastation; line
#9. SUGGESTION ONLY: communication for love ones is gone ;communication with love ones is gone. Keep up the good work. teafor2
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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ExperiencingLiphe: Right out of the gate, your picture captures the atten-
tion of the reader(s). The very first line of verbiage describes a not so pretty trail negotiated by nature's combination of fieriest winds and rain.
Your narrative/list poem flows down the page citing things progressively getting worse...Finally, the storm is over...Sadly, what was once a well
kept/manicured community with upright structures have been waylaid & ravaged by a temporarily angry show of force by nature. Now, all mem-bers must set aside personal agendas and band together and share re-sources to put this community back into its presentable working order.
Poetess has put together a well done depiction of a first tornado ex-perience. However, there are a couple of items that need addressing: In
line #3, it's should be its; line #4. Devistion should be Devastation; line
#9. SUGGESTION ONLY: communication for love ones is gone ;communication with love ones is gone. Keep up the good work. teafor2
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Thanks for all the help and suggestions. I did go and make a couple changes :)
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You are welcome. Here at Fanstory we
writers will be more than glad to offer
and receive suggestions in order to improve our work(s). You are on the right track. Stay the course. teafor2
Comment from QC Poet
Did hear on the news channel about this rare tornado that struck your area. When I was able to work as a manager for a company that opened a facility in Indianapolis we had one there the companies there had warning systems and safe areas in the building. I Hope and Pray for your Wisconsin family and friends. I have a few friends living there that made it through safely. Continued Prayers and Thanks for Sharing this Story about the scary incident.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Did hear on the news channel about this rare tornado that struck your area. When I was able to work as a manager for a company that opened a facility in Indianapolis we had one there the companies there had warning systems and safe areas in the building. I Hope and Pray for your Wisconsin family and friends. I have a few friends living there that made it through safely. Continued Prayers and Thanks for Sharing this Story about the scary incident.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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My family got lucky and I'm glad yours did as well. Thanks for the great review and wonderful thoughts :)
PS: Your family probably doesn't live far from me. We may have passed each other and never knew it. It always blows me away how I might see someone on here in person and never know it.
Comment from jmdg1954
I can't imagine facing a tornado. I hope your family is safe!
Suggestion-
You used the word "thing" 3 times in the last six sentences. Try to avoid that.
Try- February tornadoes were non-existent.
Hoping this isn't a new occurrence.
Now the word "thing" is used once.
Just trying to be helpful.
John
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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I can't imagine facing a tornado. I hope your family is safe!
Suggestion-
You used the word "thing" 3 times in the last six sentences. Try to avoid that.
Try- February tornadoes were non-existent.
Hoping this isn't a new occurrence.
Now the word "thing" is used once.
Just trying to be helpful.
John
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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I went and tried to remove thing. I think it's only used once now. Thanks for the great review and wonderful thoughts. We are all safe, even my sister in law and her family that was so close to it. All of their animals also made it out okay. Huge relief
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That is good news!
