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My father's poem book

38 total reviews 
Comment from Dawn Munro
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Poem has two syllables here, too, my friend, and your poem has brought tears to my eyes. You were blessed, Paul.
What an exceptional choice as winner for this contest! (Congratulations. It is superb.)

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
    Thanks, Dawn. You are too kind.
Comment from s.m.kirby
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This is one of the best poems I have read in a long time. I can picture you on your dad's lap as he reads from that old book of poems. I also learned to have a love for poetry at a young age. I am happy to be back on Fanstory after being off for a while. Will look for more of your poems.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
    Thanks, SM. Glad to see you back.
reply by s.m.kirby on 21-Feb-2024
    Thank you it is good to be back.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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Oh goodness, this is a wonderful, touching poem. Your grandfather must have left you lots of cherished times. I hope you do well with this poem. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
    Thanks, Rosemary. Those memories will last forever.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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In Texas poem is also two syllables. I love books, too.
Paperbacks are my favorite. No Kindles for me. I read a couple of books a week. You write good poetry. Karen :-)

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
    Thanks, Karen. No kindles for me either.
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 20-Feb-2024
    :-)
Comment from LJbutterfly
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This is a beautiful story describing the relationship between you and your dad, written in a poetry form. It flows evenly, smoothly, and tenderly, allowing the reader to envision a young child being read to at bedtime. I could almost hear the lovely poems. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
    Thanks, LJ. Dad and I were always very close.
Comment from Baltimore Born
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This is a wonderful poem. The poem is well-crafted and flows well. Good message in the poem. I like the rhyming scheme throughout the poem. You expressed fond memories of your father reading to you out of the book. Nice picture that compliments the poem well. Nice job.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
    Thanks, BB. Those are really fond memories.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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This is a lovely and well structured verse with your book of poetry forming a thread through your life from your father's lap in infancy to your eventual reunion with him when your "Earthbound spirit is set free." You beautifully capture the intimacy and love you have for this book that ages with you and never loses its precious memories. Well done and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
    Thanks, Debbie. That book sits on one of my shelves. I have bought a more recent edition to save the wear and tear on the original.
Comment from Mia Twysted
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It is a touching and heartfelt piece. Memories are gifts when they are of the love we share with another. Time will never allow us to go back but we have the experience and ability to recall it till we can see the ones we love again.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
    Thanks, Mia. Are there books in heaven?
Comment from Julie Helms
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I love this. And it reminds me of an old book of nursery, rhymes, written and illustrated in the 1940s that my mother had as a little girl, and read to me as a little girl, and I read it to my little girls. It is back on the shelf, waiting for my granddaughter to get a little older. Your poem was so well expressed and I thought of my book on the shelf the whole time. Thanks so much for sharing. Julie.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
    I'm glad I could bring back fond memories, Julie.
Comment from Ulla
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Aw it's beautiful, and I loved it. You're painting such a wonderful picture wit you lovely words and how you loved to be read poems while sitting on your father's lap. All the best of of luck with this beauty. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
    Thanks, Ulla. I'll never forget those times.