Arthur's Shining Light
Hypnotised34 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
I am so sorry to hear about Arthur. Losing a pet sucks so bad. When you are ready pick up a dog who needs a human. There are so many unloved animals out there.
Great poem. Serene and elegant with beautifully chosen words. Lovely!
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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I am so sorry to hear about Arthur. Losing a pet sucks so bad. When you are ready pick up a dog who needs a human. There are so many unloved animals out there.
Great poem. Serene and elegant with beautifully chosen words. Lovely!
D
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Doug, for this very kind and sensitive review which I deeply appreciate! Take care Debbie
Comment from Pearl Edwards
-My first read I thought, a lovely poem, then my second read after reading the notes about Arthur I can see how poignant this poem really is. What a lovely last walk to remember your special mate. Beautiful Debbie,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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-My first read I thought, a lovely poem, then my second read after reading the notes about Arthur I can see how poignant this poem really is. What a lovely last walk to remember your special mate. Beautiful Debbie,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Valda! Your lovely words are very special. Take care Debbie
Comment from LoAnn Beery
My heart breaks for you...and my mind is thinking that you are a very good writer. I did not know which thought I wanted to express first! My sympathy for losing your dog,family member,and friend.It is so very hard to lose a pet.
Your writing shows talent and experience with the pen. Blessings
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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My heart breaks for you...and my mind is thinking that you are a very good writer. I did not know which thought I wanted to express first! My sympathy for losing your dog,family member,and friend.It is so very hard to lose a pet.
Your writing shows talent and experience with the pen. Blessings
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for this kind and very thoughtful review which I greatly value! Take care Debbie
Comment from RJ Fuller
I'm so sorry for your loss. This poem is beautiful, but even more is the story behind it. There are no words to express my condolences. But remember the love you shared and Arthur will always be with you.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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I'm so sorry for your loss. This poem is beautiful, but even more is the story behind it. There are no words to express my condolences. But remember the love you shared and Arthur will always be with you.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for this extra kind and thoughtful review which I deeply value! Take care Debbie
Comment from Dawn Munro
I am so sorry for your family's loss, Debbie. It is difficult to lose them, yet our pets give us so much joy and comfort in the short time we have them -- theirs is truly unconditional love. May he rest in peace.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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I am so sorry for your family's loss, Debbie. It is difficult to lose them, yet our pets give us so much joy and comfort in the short time we have them -- theirs is truly unconditional love. May he rest in peace.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Deborah! This is a very sweet and gratefully received post. Take care Debbie
Comment from SimianSavant
Beautifully written with a fantastically authentic picture. This is really solid already as it is. A couple really small things that might help it stand out even more:
-a different font. I don't have a particular suggestion so you will have to experiment, but the current simplicity is good, so not something overly flowery.
-in your first two stanzas you ended with a rhyme, and that creates a sense of something missing in your third stanza; unless that is precisely your intent, here are a couple other words that might give you a good rhyme: door, floor, soar.
Thanks for sharing this memorable piece,
Harambe (for President)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Beautifully written with a fantastically authentic picture. This is really solid already as it is. A couple really small things that might help it stand out even more:
-a different font. I don't have a particular suggestion so you will have to experiment, but the current simplicity is good, so not something overly flowery.
-in your first two stanzas you ended with a rhyme, and that creates a sense of something missing in your third stanza; unless that is precisely your intent, here are a couple other words that might give you a good rhyme: door, floor, soar.
Thanks for sharing this memorable piece,
Harambe (for President)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Harambe! And, as ever, I greatly value your thoughts and suggestions. But there is a rhyme in the third stanza as the format demands - aabb - so I'm a bit perplexed . Take care Debbie
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So you have:
Me/sea
light/sight
gold/old
still/will
gaze/rays
awe/more <= this is where I don't hear a rhyme. Am I missing something?
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Yes, why doesn't awe rhyme with more? It does by my ear. Don't get it, sorry. There's certainly assonance anyway which is good enough if you don't except the rhyme.
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'accept' not except.
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With an American accent it doesn't rhyme at all. With a British one, it might?
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Ah well there's the rub! It's written for the English ear then :))
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Ah. In that case pay me no heed; there are quite a few English folks on this site.
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Whereabouts in the US are you?
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Cincinnati Ohio, about a mile up from the road from the zoo where they shot Harambe
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Oh that's so sad. I didn't know the background but have just watched the video...
Comment from BethShelby
This is an beautuful picture and knowing it is this old dogs like walk makes me want to shed a tear. Your minute poem is more upbeat from the dogs perspective alluding the fact his has hopes of a hearafter where he will be made whole.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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This is an beautuful picture and knowing it is this old dogs like walk makes me want to shed a tear. Your minute poem is more upbeat from the dogs perspective alluding the fact his has hopes of a hearafter where he will be made whole.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Beth! I greatly appreciate your kind thoughts. Take care Debbie
Comment from Jacob1395
My dog's eight years old now, but to me he still seems like a young puppy, even though he's a little bit grayer now. A well written piece Debbie. I could feel his yearning to run. I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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My dog's eight years old now, but to me he still seems like a young puppy, even though he's a little bit grayer now. A well written piece Debbie. I could feel his yearning to run. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Jacob! A pleasure to receive your lovely review. Take care Debbie
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am very sorry for your loss.
Arthur was a patient friend
who answered every call.
He never complained to you
When you threw that orange ball.
He endured the many washes
and baths you put him through
And I guess it evens out since
He ate most of your shoe.
He was a very faithful friend
and never let you down.
So it will be sad for a while
That he is not around.
for you Karen :-(
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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I am very sorry for your loss.
Arthur was a patient friend
who answered every call.
He never complained to you
When you threw that orange ball.
He endured the many washes
and baths you put him through
And I guess it evens out since
He ate most of your shoe.
He was a very faithful friend
and never let you down.
So it will be sad for a while
That he is not around.
for you Karen :-(
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Well done, Karen! A lovely and much appreciated little elegy. Most of it pretty accurate, although I don't think he ever chewed a shoe...maybe his sister's neck but that doesn't count! Take care Debbie
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I thought shoes were dogs favorite snack. Karen
Comment from Julie Helms
This is just a beautiful, heartfelt poem that honors Arthur. The picture is a great complement to your words. I am sorry for your loss. They can become like children to us, and they always leave us too soon.
Thank you for sharing this with us. Julie.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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This is just a beautiful, heartfelt poem that honors Arthur. The picture is a great complement to your words. I am sorry for your loss. They can become like children to us, and they always leave us too soon.
Thank you for sharing this with us. Julie.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Julie, for your very kind and thoughtful review which is greatly appreciated! Take care Debbie
