Loosing An Old Friend
It's hard to keep the friends from you childhood.7 total reviews
Comment from XinaD
I love everything about this. It's fun, has a great tempo, vivid imagery, fantastical shenanigans and clever wordplay. It reminds me of Shel Silverstein's children's work.
If this isn't your usual style, it should be. Very few people can make poems like this 'pop off' just right but you definitely can! Excellent work!!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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I love everything about this. It's fun, has a great tempo, vivid imagery, fantastical shenanigans and clever wordplay. It reminds me of Shel Silverstein's children's work.
If this isn't your usual style, it should be. Very few people can make poems like this 'pop off' just right but you definitely can! Excellent work!!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the nice words!
Comment from bob cullen
This is bad, but i must confess I have a sick and I love bad verse. It is also rather clever with great rhyme and pretty fair meter. It's such a good relief from all those spiritual and non-rhyming poems. Thank you for brightening my day with a bit of levity. That smile won't leave my face. Thank you again.
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This is bad, but i must confess I have a sick and I love bad verse. It is also rather clever with great rhyme and pretty fair meter. It's such a good relief from all those spiritual and non-rhyming poems. Thank you for brightening my day with a bit of levity. That smile won't leave my face. Thank you again.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
Comment from Douglas Goff
I have heard that rubbing lard on a person kills a whole number of ailments. Especially pickled-toes. But again, it's just a rumor.
This was a great fun read. Enjoyed it immensely. Unique is intriguing.
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I have heard that rubbing lard on a person kills a whole number of ailments. Especially pickled-toes. But again, it's just a rumor.
This was a great fun read. Enjoyed it immensely. Unique is intriguing.
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
Comment from papa55mike
Yes, they do. There are many friends I once knew who are waiting for the Lord's return. But I'm still here. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Yes, they do. There are many friends I once knew who are waiting for the Lord's return. But I'm still here. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the positive feed back.
Comment from derek campbell
Wow such an amazing writer you are I love everything about it your really good I Can't wait to see more of your amazing skills but next time try and express your feeling a bit more deeper on certain areas but other then that really good stuff can't wait to read more of your magic keep it up
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Wow such an amazing writer you are I love everything about it your really good I Can't wait to see more of your amazing skills but next time try and express your feeling a bit more deeper on certain areas but other then that really good stuff can't wait to read more of your magic keep it up
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from NanaGaye
Ha Ha The things that happen in our childhood. Not only a poem but a humorous story. Just a thought, perhaps instead of internal rhyming, make the poem longer ie
A big, fat monster, oozing slime,
Once ate up a friend of mine.
He was careless and he dropped his guard,
While we were playing in the yard., etc All the best NanaGaye
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Ha Ha The things that happen in our childhood. Not only a poem but a humorous story. Just a thought, perhaps instead of internal rhyming, make the poem longer ie
A big, fat monster, oozing slime,
Once ate up a friend of mine.
He was careless and he dropped his guard,
While we were playing in the yard., etc All the best NanaGaye
Comment Written 29-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
There was so much going on in this poem which relates perfectly to the jam-packed days of childhood. I really enjoyed it. Humorous, imaginative and fun. A great entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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There was so much going on in this poem which relates perfectly to the jam-packed days of childhood. I really enjoyed it. Humorous, imaginative and fun. A great entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Thank you Marilyn. I am just getting back to writing after a break.
