Saltwater Ghosts
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "I Spy"Young girl with special abilities.
17 total reviews
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
aha, the plot thickens. I hadn't thought anything about spies, but now I'm starting to wonder why Artie is there. Is the area a place that has navy ships passing by, or any kind of military compound around? How interesting. Poor Lester. I never wear short sleeves when I'm in the sun, and I sure don't take my shirt off. I'm lilly white, but I don't care anymore. I can't stand getting sunburned. I've had a few in my time that left blisters, and that's enough for me. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
aha, the plot thickens. I hadn't thought anything about spies, but now I'm starting to wonder why Artie is there. Is the area a place that has navy ships passing by, or any kind of military compound around? How interesting. Poor Lester. I never wear short sleeves when I'm in the sun, and I sure don't take my shirt off. I'm lilly white, but I don't care anymore. I can't stand getting sunburned. I've had a few in my time that left blisters, and that's enough for me. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I got blistered by the sun once, I was thirteen. Never again. I try to stay out of the sun. Thank you for this awesome review. I'm so glad you are enjoying this. Means a lot. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Lester is suffering for his summer of fun (sunburn), but seems to really enjoy being with Heddy. He has made Heddy uncomfortable with his questions about Artie. Good plot point in a well-written story.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Lester is suffering for his summer of fun (sunburn), but seems to really enjoy being with Heddy. He has made Heddy uncomfortable with his questions about Artie. Good plot point in a well-written story.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Carol. We shall see what Artie is up to soon. So glad you are enjoying this story. Gretchen
Comment from papa55mike
We all remember those special days of summer when life seemed so full and neverending. What a wonderfully written story. Best of luck with your writing! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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We all remember those special days of summer when life seemed so full and neverending. What a wonderfully written story. Best of luck with your writing! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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You've made my day. I'm so happy you enjoyed this. Thank you for the excellent review and 6 stars. Gretchen
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Sunburns are not pleasurable, but vinegar is an old remedy that tended to help ease the burn.
Building sand castles fun, but as you said "they don't last long" before waves destroy all that hard effort placed into constructing them.
Seems Lester threw a temper tantrum in response to his sand castle's demise when he tossed sand into the sea and said "Here. You might as well take all of it.". Would change the . at the end of this sentence to an ! for emphasis.
In one place you wrote "U boats.". In others you wrote "Uboats.". Should be U-boats.
Dialogue sounds like something two youngsters of their ages would say to each other.
U-boats and pirates, vivid figments of youthful imaginations.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Sunburns are not pleasurable, but vinegar is an old remedy that tended to help ease the burn.
Building sand castles fun, but as you said "they don't last long" before waves destroy all that hard effort placed into constructing them.
Seems Lester threw a temper tantrum in response to his sand castle's demise when he tossed sand into the sea and said "Here. You might as well take all of it.". Would change the . at the end of this sentence to an ! for emphasis.
In one place you wrote "U boats.". In others you wrote "Uboats.". Should be U-boats.
Dialogue sounds like something two youngsters of their ages would say to each other.
U-boats and pirates, vivid figments of youthful imaginations.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Brett for the nice review and the edits. Will fix those. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
LOL. I can almost picture this conversation and the assumptions. Even as we age, we have to keep our imaginations in check to keep from flying off into "Never Never Land." Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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LOL. I can almost picture this conversation and the assumptions. Even as we age, we have to keep our imaginations in check to keep from flying off into "Never Never Land." Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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My imagination is crazy. Keeps things interesting fir a while. Thankbyou for this. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is a great chapter, and it seems the friendship between Heddy and Lester is blossoming. I know there must be plans for the grandmother's appearance in future chapters. I was just wondering what happened to her.
Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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This is a great chapter, and it seems the friendship between Heddy and Lester is blossoming. I know there must be plans for the grandmother's appearance in future chapters. I was just wondering what happened to her.
Best, JohnC
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Heddy's grandmother appears to her when she's alone. She will definitely return. Thank you fir this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
Lester is quite astute, perhaps more insightful than Heddy in terms of thinking about Artie. Lester and Heddy are relating more easily now. It will be interesting to see what transpires with Artie.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Lester is quite astute, perhaps more insightful than Heddy in terms of thinking about Artie. Lester and Heddy are relating more easily now. It will be interesting to see what transpires with Artie.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Heddy sees the good in people despite snooping around. She doesn't realize adults can lie convincingly. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It's funny how children's conversations are different during war time. I saw a Russian U-boat in the dock when I was on one of my sailing excursions in Europe around five years ago, and I did wonder what it was doing there. I was mistrusting of its intentions. I enjoyed your fine chapter as these two are content in each other's company and Lester is observant about Archie. Always a pleasure to read your work Gretchen, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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It's funny how children's conversations are different during war time. I saw a Russian U-boat in the dock when I was on one of my sailing excursions in Europe around five years ago, and I did wonder what it was doing there. I was mistrusting of its intentions. I enjoyed your fine chapter as these two are content in each other's company and Lester is observant about Archie. Always a pleasure to read your work Gretchen, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Dolly. I'm glad you enjoyed that. I'd love to see a U-boat. Gretchen
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Have you never seen one? The are enormous! Yet they look so small in films, love Dolly x x x
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I was thinking they were the size of a car. Lol. Perspective from Hollywood. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You have true feelings for your writing that stand out right away. These days, my reviewing is slow. I am
hibernating. My pain is such that I am taking my aspirin whenever I wake up after fours or more of sleep. I am keeping track of my dosage times. Then, I drink some liquid, eat a pouch of tuna, and crawl under my heated blankets and pads. Off to sleep I go, Karen :-)
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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You have true feelings for your writing that stand out right away. These days, my reviewing is slow. I am
hibernating. My pain is such that I am taking my aspirin whenever I wake up after fours or more of sleep. I am keeping track of my dosage times. Then, I drink some liquid, eat a pouch of tuna, and crawl under my heated blankets and pads. Off to sleep I go, Karen :-)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you for reviewing while in pain. I appreciate this nice review. Gretchen
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I love heddy. Karen
Comment from BethShelby
Since Artie doesn't seem to want anyone to know he is there, he must ge up to something.I guess the know the reason at some point. I think it would be ideal to grow near a beach. I'm wondering if this entire story will take place during the time school is out for vacation and if Lester will be going back or he will continue to stay with aunt. I'll wait to find out.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Since Artie doesn't seem to want anyone to know he is there, he must ge up to something.I guess the know the reason at some point. I think it would be ideal to grow near a beach. I'm wondering if this entire story will take place during the time school is out for vacation and if Lester will be going back or he will continue to stay with aunt. I'll wait to find out.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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I'm not sure if Lester will be going home at summers end. We will find out together. Thank you for this. Gretchen
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I love it when people let me know their characters will decide the stories destination. Some writers have in all in outline form from start to finish. Not me, I like to be surprised by where my writing takes me.
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Me, too. I flunked a creative writing course because I couldn't follow a formula. That makes it math, not creative writing. Lol.
