Reviews from

The Year of Dragon

A true story

6 total reviews 
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This was a very well-written and interesting first post. Welcome to Fanstory! I am not superstitious either but I hope it is true that all of your bad luck is gone now. I look forward to reading more of your stories. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
    Thank you for your comment Marilyn.
Comment from lancellot
Good
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Interesting chain of events. I would recommend adding spacing between paragraphs.

notes:

It's supposed to be bringing you good fortune, good luck and prosperity.

-It's supposed to bring you good fortune, luck, and prosperity.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
    Thank you.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Congrats on your first post! I enjoyed it. I thought your description of the accident and your recovery was well written. I love the use of dialogue, even if just one line, as that perfectly emphasized the accident. On New Years day of the Year of the Dragon does seem like bad luck! Not a good way to start it. But I also feel a bit of optimism at the end which is great. Terrific job for your first post!

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
    Thank you for your comments and feedback.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is a great first submission. Informative and well-written.

Just a suggestion:

Break the story up into paragraphs. It gives your reader's subconscious breaks and a chance to consider points.

As far as luck goes, make your own. Great write-up!
D

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
    Thanks Douglas!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Wow, Doc, what an amazing story. You are lucky to have survived it, so, perhaps, the Dragon was lucky for you after all. As a physician, you know how badly it could have gone.

Thank you for sharing your story with us, and good to see you on this site.

Since you are a Newbie, as new folks are called on this site, I'll give you some advice. Space your paragraphs with an extra like in between, as I've done here. It's just what they do on this site, lol. It helps make it more readable.

Enjoyable read where you shared a bit about yourself and your culture.

Take care,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
    Thanks Rhonda. Great feedback.

    Happy Chinese New Year (a bit late but still good wishes).

    Stanley
reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 09-Mar-2024
    Thank you, Stanley, same to you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I am so sorry you suffered in this accident and we often have lingering mental health problems after an accident like this as we relive the events. Perhaps some therapy would help you overcome your flash-backs. A well-written sad post, thank you for sharing your honest post and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
    Thanks Dolly.