Comment from Kaiku

Excellent

awesome picture to strengthen your message. 5-7-5 has a unique beauty in facilitating a story. Personally, I did not like the ending of line 1 with 'your' Line 2 has to begin with 'cares' and I struggled with the word 'seems' or should it be 'seem'? anyway, a solid message.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024

Thanks so much Kaiku. I'm happy it resonated with you even though you saw some rough edges :). There is truly strength in numbers as we have witnessed so many times here on FS.

Melissa

Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Excellent

This is a beautifully written haiku. Nice overall presentation I love your photo compliments your words well. Excellent didn't have a six to give I wish I did.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024

Thanks so much Joanne. I'm happy it resonated with you. There is truly strength in numbers as we have witnessed so many times here on FS. :)

Melissa

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Melissa. That is so very true. I loved your 5-7-5 poem and I wish you the best in the contest.
Also, I've meant to ask you. Do you know anything about Jim, Pantygynt? It's a couple of months since I've last seen him. Ulla xcx

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024

Thanks for the review Ulla. Yes, I reached out to Jim in an email and he said he is really in a funk and not interested in writing now. I am tempted to sponsor a poetry contest called "letters to Jim" and then I would send him an email so he could read the entries. What do you think?

Melissa

reply by Ulla on 15-Mar-2024

I think that would be great. I hope there would be room for prose as well. But if not, I'll write a a haiku or a Tanka. I think many would be interested in the prose bit. Go for it!I will be looking out for it. I miss his writing. Ulla xcx

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Wow! What a great illustration for your poem. Those fragile limbs of seedlings reaching out to hold that heavy dewdrop really show us that there's strength in numbers! Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024

Thanks so much Helen. I'm happy it resonated with you. There is truly strength in numbers as we have witnessed so many times here on FS. :)

Melissa

Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

An excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry contest. A lovely message given in very few words. The picture adds to the poem nicely. Very good job. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024

Thank you Marilyn.

Melissa

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024

Thank you Marilyn.

Melissa

Comment from Rachelle Allen

Excellent

SO very true! And it's so comforting when those "numbers" join on for the task, isn't it? Anything seems possible then. Wonderful entry; I hope it does well for you!

Also, WHAT A COOL GRAPHIC!!! Where in the world did you find that? It could not be more perfect for this purpose. xoxo

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024

Hey there Rachelle. Thank you. I appreciate your lovely review and found the photo on Goog... no info on its source... Hugs, sweet friend.

Melissa

Comment from Daylily

Exceptional

This is an outstanding entry in the 5-7-5 contest.

That photograph draws you in and holds interest long after reading your excellent message. So fascinating.

I think you are going to do very well in the contest results.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024

Thanks so much Lily. I'm happy it resonated with you. There is truly strength in numbers as we have witnessed so many times here on FS. :)

Melissa

Comment from Brenda Strauser

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this poem. I like the words,'" when the weight of your cares. Too heavy matches the picture well. The picture is good and a very good choice for the poem. Very good.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024

Thanks so much Brenda. I'm happy it resonated with you. There is truly strength in numbers as we have witnessed so many times here on FS. :)

Melissa

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

Even the Bible tells us that 'when two or more are gathered together' there is additional strength. Your words deliver wisdom and a clear message. We are more powerful when we band together in agreement, just as the seedlings in your photo have banned together to hold the drop of water they all need but can't hold individually. Great presentation. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024

Thanks so much LJ. I'm happy it resonated with you. There is truly strength in numbers as we have witnessed so many times here on FS. :)

Melissa

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Good entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest. Good syllables count. The flow and lines connection need some work. I don't understand the meaning. To improve flow keep complete phrases in each line.

Suggestion.....

when the weight of your (your what?)

(Your cares doesn't make sense) cares seems too heavy to bear...

there's strength in numbers
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when the worl's weight is

too heavy on your shoulders

find strength in numbers



Well done

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024

Thanks so much Gypsy. I'm happy it resonated with you even though you saw its rough edges. There is truly strength in numbers as we have witnessed so many times here on FS. :)

Melissa