Comment from Mark Jackson

Excellent

Absolutely lovely, very hard to write a lot about a form which is so succinct. I love the imagery of spring nest building. My only suggestion would be to make the text larger to make it stand out more and easier to read.

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024

Thanks for your suggestion, Mark. I?m not sure how to do that. I?d appreciate it, if you could tell me how. I also haven?t figured out how to add relevant artwork, so my poems have stood alone without pictoral support.

reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024

Thanks for your suggestion, Mark. I?m not sure how to do that. I?d appreciate it, if you could tell me how. I also haven?t figured out how to add relevant artwork, so my poems have stood alone without pictoral support.

Comment from Terry Reilly

Excellent

I liked this a lot. But aren't there six syllables in the first line? I saw a magpie yesterday carrying a piece of dead vegetation which must have been twelve inches long. God bless him.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024

So glad you liked it. You must be reading the word towards as two syllables. I intended it to sound like one: twards. Thanks for sharing about the magpie.

Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

This entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry contest meets the criteria for syllables. A lovely view of Spring from a kitchen window. Very enjoyable. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024

Thanks, Marilyn! I love watching the birds and the view from my window is a perfect place from which to watch them.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I love watching birds nesting and flying with bits of twigs and debris to build their nests, your poem brought the birds artistic prowess to life here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024

Thanks, Dolly. I've missed hearing from you. x

Comment from Mintybee

Good

I liked your observational poem. A bird building a nest is a sure sign spring is returning. The words you chose conveyed your meaning clearly. However, your syllable count is off. Your first line has 6 syllables in it. Other than that, a decent poem.
Mintybee

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024

Hi, Minty Bee. You may have counted towards as two syllables. I counted it as one.