In the Quiet of Our Room
Familiar feelings we can't smother12 total reviews
Comment from Rina B.
Real love is a warmth like no other. You did a phenomenal job with the prompt, so congratulations on your win! I love that this seems to be a song about a love that has lasted a while, it's established, but the excitement for alone time together and the mutual attraction is just as strong as two brand new lovers.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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Real love is a warmth like no other. You did a phenomenal job with the prompt, so congratulations on your win! I love that this seems to be a song about a love that has lasted a while, it's established, but the excitement for alone time together and the mutual attraction is just as strong as two brand new lovers.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Rena. Your description of the love portrayed here is exactly correct. Very perceptive. Thanks again.
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Thank you, Rena. Your description of the love portrayed here is exactly correct. Very perceptive. Thanks again.
Comment from gramalot8
I really enjoyed the message in your poem... your song (wish I knew the tune)
It's wonderful to read about a love that is ignited so lovingly after so many years. I miss that ... I hope it's true for you. Good luck in the prompt contest and thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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I really enjoyed the message in your poem... your song (wish I knew the tune)
It's wonderful to read about a love that is ignited so lovingly after so many years. I miss that ... I hope it's true for you. Good luck in the prompt contest and thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Gram, if that's your real name. I also miss that. Glad it was true for both of us.
If you like, I can send you a musical version of the song. Just email me at nval@me.com.
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Thank you, Gram, if that's your real name. I also miss that. Glad it was true for both of us.
If you like, I can send you a musical version of the song. Just email me at nval@me.com.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Norm,
This is a wonderful love poem. It shows devotion and thanks for the gift.
It seems to say this couple looks for any time they have to make love. I like the refrain of "In the quiet of our room" . It almost gives a holiness to the room and the love shared in it,
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on winning the contest.
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Hi Norm,
This is a wonderful love poem. It shows devotion and thanks for the gift.
It seems to say this couple looks for any time they have to make love. I like the refrain of "In the quiet of our room" . It almost gives a holiness to the room and the love shared in it,
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on winning the contest.
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 25-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Dragon. I do believe there is a holiness.
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Thank you, Dragon. I do believe there is a holiness.
Comment from teafor2
Norm, this is sensuous, but classy and tastefully done...A very challenging
write from the standpoint of rhyming with the refrain, and still keep a cogent theme...Scribe's tone is effusive, but never profane; adamant, but
not stalking. Selected picture, title/theme/tone is 'congress' driven. Very
cautiously and subtly put together...It's understandable why this entry
won the contest. Congratulations. teafor2
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Norm, this is sensuous, but classy and tastefully done...A very challenging
write from the standpoint of rhyming with the refrain, and still keep a cogent theme...Scribe's tone is effusive, but never profane; adamant, but
not stalking. Selected picture, title/theme/tone is 'congress' driven. Very
cautiously and subtly put together...It's understandable why this entry
won the contest. Congratulations. teafor2
Comment Written 25-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Tea. Correct, never any attempt to be profane or anything but expressing of love.
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Thank you, Tea. Correct, never any attempt to be profane or anything but expressing of love.
Comment from jessizero
I can see why this piece won the contest! It was romantic and sensual without being graphic. I loved the repetition of that last line throughout the poem. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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I can see why this piece won the contest! It was romantic and sensual without being graphic. I loved the repetition of that last line throughout the poem. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Jessi. There was no need to be graphic. Our love was always romantic and sensual.
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Thank you, Jessi. There was no need to be graphic. Our love was always romantic and sensual.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
the song lyrics are well-written
words that make the quiet of the room come alive
Candles are so intriguing when remembering someone you love; when you are alive, I use them only for scent.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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the song lyrics are well-written
words that make the quiet of the room come alive
Candles are so intriguing when remembering someone you love; when you are alive, I use them only for scent.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Rosemary. I appreciate all the feedback I have received.
Comment from royowen
I thought this beautifully gentle and exudes the will of the kind of that is full of the everlasting quality of love. The repeating refrain completed and set the mood of the whole narrative, well done, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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I thought this beautifully gentle and exudes the will of the kind of that is full of the everlasting quality of love. The repeating refrain completed and set the mood of the whole narrative, well done, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Roy. God bless you and the cute girl in the picture with you.
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Thank you Norm
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A warm, calm and peaceful connection between two like-minded people that brings a kind of magic into the atmosphere you share, a fine post for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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A warm, calm and peaceful connection between two like-minded people that brings a kind of magic into the atmosphere you share, a fine post for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. And for your past encouragements.
Comment from SimianSavant
This is a good one. The constancy of the repeated line mirrors the enduring flame of your image. It mentions song lyrics at the top -- have you written music to go with this?
I don't see any need for edits, except that for the benefit of some of the readers here who are twice my age, a larger font might be much appreciated (so I've been told).
Thanks for the read,
SS
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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This is a good one. The constancy of the repeated line mirrors the enduring flame of your image. It mentions song lyrics at the top -- have you written music to go with this?
I don't see any need for edits, except that for the benefit of some of the readers here who are twice my age, a larger font might be much appreciated (so I've been told).
Thanks for the read,
SS
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Simian. I do have music to go with this. If you like, email me at nval@me.com, and I will send it to you. Maybe you could see the small font better if you took off the gorilla mask!
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Sent!
Comment from Wendy G
I enjoyed your poem greatly, and thought it was smoothly and well composed with thoughtfulness. However, it is meant to be a "blind" contest, and you have identified yourself in your notes, which is against the rules, so you should quickly remove your notes if possible. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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I enjoyed your poem greatly, and thought it was smoothly and well composed with thoughtfulness. However, it is meant to be a "blind" contest, and you have identified yourself in your notes, which is against the rules, so you should quickly remove your notes if possible. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Wendy, for your review. Oops. I did remove my credentials.
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Thank you, Wendy, for your review. Oops. I did remove my credentials.
