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A stream of consciousness.28 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
cool loved this poem.
I loved this stream-of-consciousness poem -which is about drinking and being lost in one's thoughts as one enjoys a drink. I like your work and have just finished reviewing two of your other poems per your request. BTW what is your favorite Scotch? I like single-malt whiskey and bourbon. My favorite bourbon is Knob Creek which is the favorite drink of my favorite literary character Stone Barrington, a James Bond-like character who was featured in over 60 novels by the late Stuart Woods. He was always drinking it.
BTW I ran this poem through Bing Co-PIlot. Co-PIlot does a great job of poetry analysis. I usually as it to analyze poems I am reviewing or my own poems using the following template
Please analyze the following poem indicating meter, if any, poetic techniques used, diction, sounds, theme, tone, word count, syllable count by line, (spell out each line indicating syllable, and word count per line, poetic schools, and influences.
it is particularly useful when I am struggling to get the meter right in traditional verse.. I often will revise it accordingly after Bing checks the meter for me.
if you have not use AI tools in analyzing poetry yet, give it a try!
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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cool loved this poem.
I loved this stream-of-consciousness poem -which is about drinking and being lost in one's thoughts as one enjoys a drink. I like your work and have just finished reviewing two of your other poems per your request. BTW what is your favorite Scotch? I like single-malt whiskey and bourbon. My favorite bourbon is Knob Creek which is the favorite drink of my favorite literary character Stone Barrington, a James Bond-like character who was featured in over 60 novels by the late Stuart Woods. He was always drinking it.
BTW I ran this poem through Bing Co-PIlot. Co-PIlot does a great job of poetry analysis. I usually as it to analyze poems I am reviewing or my own poems using the following template
Please analyze the following poem indicating meter, if any, poetic techniques used, diction, sounds, theme, tone, word count, syllable count by line, (spell out each line indicating syllable, and word count per line, poetic schools, and influences.
it is particularly useful when I am struggling to get the meter right in traditional verse.. I often will revise it accordingly after Bing checks the meter for me.
if you have not use AI tools in analyzing poetry yet, give it a try!
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Thank you so much for the review and advice.
Comment from Carlos' girl
This is like a Steely Dan song. I like it. It's got a nice cadence to it, an almost musical quality. Scotch whiskey has been known to produce great poetry. Keep drinking
Xoxo.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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This is like a Steely Dan song. I like it. It's got a nice cadence to it, an almost musical quality. Scotch whiskey has been known to produce great poetry. Keep drinking
Xoxo.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much
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I thought you would get a chuckle out of my comment
I enjoyed your poem tho. Very good
Comment from Kelly Louisa Balliu
This is ironic, as I am fairly new to the site and this was one of the first poems I read.
I remember that I was sitting on the bus on my way to work and I read your poem twice and wondered how the poem would have sounded if it had been written after a double malt whiskey, or in contrast, after no whiskey at all.
Would the same stream of consciousness have burst forth? Would it have rhymed as well? Would the tone still have been maudlin? I recently read some of Leonard Cohen's poetry and this one resounded a little like some of his.
But that is a compliment of course :-)
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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This is ironic, as I am fairly new to the site and this was one of the first poems I read.
I remember that I was sitting on the bus on my way to work and I read your poem twice and wondered how the poem would have sounded if it had been written after a double malt whiskey, or in contrast, after no whiskey at all.
Would the same stream of consciousness have burst forth? Would it have rhymed as well? Would the tone still have been maudlin? I recently read some of Leonard Cohen's poetry and this one resounded a little like some of his.
But that is a compliment of course :-)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you
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Book Of Longing..
That was the Cohen book I was thinking of. I really liked it.
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Thank you. I'll have a look for it.
Comment from Debra White
Hello Mark,
I enjoyed reading your free verse poem - I've read it over and over and I've come to the conclusion that pretty much anything can be poetry, depending on how it's delivered and received.
Your train of thought took me on a journey of many questions and no answers! I'm sure I will be reliving the trip for a good while :)
Good luck in the contest and best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Hello Mark,
I enjoyed reading your free verse poem - I've read it over and over and I've come to the conclusion that pretty much anything can be poetry, depending on how it's delivered and received.
Your train of thought took me on a journey of many questions and no answers! I'm sure I will be reliving the trip for a good while :)
Good luck in the contest and best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you
Comment from RodG
Hi, Mark. I am not sure how to react to this poem. I feel I could be looking at a piece of abstract art about a vaguely sketched figure in a chair talking to an another figure just as sketchy. Are the Speaker's thoughts "poetry"? To be honest, what is poetry these days? Rod
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Hi, Mark. I am not sure how to react to this poem. I feel I could be looking at a piece of abstract art about a vaguely sketched figure in a chair talking to an another figure just as sketchy. Are the Speaker's thoughts "poetry"? To be honest, what is poetry these days? Rod
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much. I owe you one.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think there is poetry in everything in life Mark and we should not shy away from writing a few lines in poetic verse to pass our message on like you have here, an unusually post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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I think there is poetry in everything in life Mark and we should not shy away from writing a few lines in poetic verse to pass our message on like you have here, an unusually post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much.
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You are most welcome Mark x
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
Hi Mark,
I found this fascinating to read. Unusual, quirky and original.
I suppose anything can be so-called poetry when given and perceived in a certain manner - though I strongly suspect a 'tongue in cheek' at work here :)
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Hi Mark,
I found this fascinating to read. Unusual, quirky and original.
I suppose anything can be so-called poetry when given and perceived in a certain manner - though I strongly suspect a 'tongue in cheek' at work here :)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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To me this is poetry it came from the soul and it has metre and rhyming. I wrote it as a spoken word piece and have performed it a few times now including once on a rather niche radio show. I have been unable to attach the audio since it is in MP4 and not the required MP3. Thank you for your time reading and reviewing it is very much appreciated.
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Yes, I did feel it was authenic too, coming from the heart.
You could probably find a free MP4 converter online, then you can post the audio.
Comment from jessizero
I loved your poem about the nature of poetry. I wish I had a six star review left to give you. You definitley deserve one. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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I loved your poem about the nature of poetry. I wish I had a six star review left to give you. You definitley deserve one. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much
Comment from royowen
I love this, I think the souls of men know the true differences between poetry and prose, poetry is pondering, a mix of certainty and uncertainty, irony, device, confusion, and again certainty, Dillon Thomas was a drunk, there's confusion. Metaphor, alliteration and rhyme, all poetry beautifully written blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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I love this, I think the souls of men know the true differences between poetry and prose, poetry is pondering, a mix of certainty and uncertainty, irony, device, confusion, and again certainty, Dillon Thomas was a drunk, there's confusion. Metaphor, alliteration and rhyme, all poetry beautifully written blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Roy, I really do appreciate your kind words.
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Bless you
Comment from GoWiSt
Nice complementary picture art choice.
"I asked my wife did she love me?" Would read better as 'I asked my wife, "Do you love me?" or 'I asked my wife whether she loved me'--no question mark needed.
"I drink whisky and no one wants me," Hmm, really can't wonder why. LOL
Yes, I see it now; you're higher than the sky. What is the vice president's name? LOL
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Nice complementary picture art choice.
"I asked my wife did she love me?" Would read better as 'I asked my wife, "Do you love me?" or 'I asked my wife whether she loved me'--no question mark needed.
"I drink whisky and no one wants me," Hmm, really can't wonder why. LOL
Yes, I see it now; you're higher than the sky. What is the vice president's name? LOL
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Thank you, but it was never about rewriting and editing it was just about writing. Sometimes I paw over ever word, but not in this case I wanted it raw.
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Gotcha!
