Blood Moon On The Rise
A sonnet about the eclipse on the ocean3 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this. It is pretty lyrical in its style. The moon has definitely inspired many poems across the centuries.
My favorite line is:
Yet as the moon begins its gentle creep,
and your personification is definitely accomplishing something here.
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I liked reading this. It is pretty lyrical in its style. The moon has definitely inspired many poems across the centuries.
My favorite line is:
Yet as the moon begins its gentle creep,
and your personification is definitely accomplishing something here.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is well crafted with stunning imagery, drawing the reader instantly into this mesmerising scene. I love the moon's creep and the hush that descends in particular. The only issue I have is with the rhyming couplet: the first line is one too many syllables and the second line is out of meter (which surprised me because everything else has been done so perfectly). But, otherwise, a great verse, Miranda. Good luck! Debbie
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This is well crafted with stunning imagery, drawing the reader instantly into this mesmerising scene. I love the moon's creep and the hush that descends in particular. The only issue I have is with the rhyming couplet: the first line is one too many syllables and the second line is out of meter (which surprised me because everything else has been done so perfectly). But, otherwise, a great verse, Miranda. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 25-Mar-2024
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautiful sonnet that you have written about the solar eclipse that's coming up and I wish you the very best I will not be able to see a full eclipse where I live, but parts of the US are going to be able to see it quite well. Patricia .
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This is a beautiful sonnet that you have written about the solar eclipse that's coming up and I wish you the very best I will not be able to see a full eclipse where I live, but parts of the US are going to be able to see it quite well. Patricia .
Comment Written 25-Mar-2024
