Freckles
free verse8 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Moments often fade into the past so quickly that we consider them flashes in time. Or maybe this trick of light was a one night stand, soon forgotten, your poem is open to interpretation Amy and enjoyed your tantalising words, good luck with the contest and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
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Moments often fade into the past so quickly that we consider them flashes in time. Or maybe this trick of light was a one night stand, soon forgotten, your poem is open to interpretation Amy and enjoyed your tantalising words, good luck with the contest and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
Comment from Mark Jackson
That is bloody amazing, I love it. I really like the way it trails down the page like fingers down a spine. I like the way it subverts the trope of waking to find your dream lover has gone. Would I change anything about it, perhaps one thing...I would like to be the author. 6 stars and I hope to read more!
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That is bloody amazing, I love it. I really like the way it trails down the page like fingers down a spine. I like the way it subverts the trope of waking to find your dream lover has gone. Would I change anything about it, perhaps one thing...I would like to be the author. 6 stars and I hope to read more!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
Comment from royowen
As a redhead I know all about freckles. Such fair skinned people should never live where the sun shines, or, at least where it shines weakly, we really pay the price later in life for migrating to warm places, heh heh, welcome to fanstory, a great first post, blessings Roy
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As a redhead I know all about freckles. Such fair skinned people should never live where the sun shines, or, at least where it shines weakly, we really pay the price later in life for migrating to warm places, heh heh, welcome to fanstory, a great first post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I love your free verse poem Amy. The sensual feel to your words as they ramble over the page is beautifully portrayed. Congrats on a great first up read frim you and welcome to Fan story.
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I love your free verse poem Amy. The sensual feel to your words as they ramble over the page is beautifully portrayed. Congrats on a great first up read frim you and welcome to Fan story.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
Comment from GWHARGIS
Congratulations on your first poem here. I loved the hint of intimacy in this. The tracing the freckles on the skin of your lover. Then you throw in the mystery of if it's real or not. Will you be there when he /she wakes? Were you ever there? Great poem. Gretchen
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Congratulations on your first poem here. I loved the hint of intimacy in this. The tracing the freckles on the skin of your lover. Then you throw in the mystery of if it's real or not. Will you be there when he /she wakes? Were you ever there? Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
Comment from teafor2
Amy, an enticing and teasing meandering formatted sequenced flowing
dreamy-like quality of protagonist being secretively fondled as they slept.
A tastefully done quasi-sensual post...Captivating free verse for the contest. Good luck. teafor2
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Amy, an enticing and teasing meandering formatted sequenced flowing
dreamy-like quality of protagonist being secretively fondled as they slept.
A tastefully done quasi-sensual post...Captivating free verse for the contest. Good luck. teafor2
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Free Verse poetry contest and a nice first post. Welcome to Fanstory! The descriptions in this poem are just lovely and brought such vivid images to my mind. I like the cascading look of the poem as well. Nicely done. Good luck.
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An excellent entry for the Free Verse poetry contest and a nice first post. Welcome to Fanstory! The descriptions in this poem are just lovely and brought such vivid images to my mind. I like the cascading look of the poem as well. Nicely done. Good luck.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
This is a great first poem! You use a lot of nice, descriptive words. I love when you say, "speckled sun-kisses spread careless up from your wrists." Your poem has a nice flow to it as well. Welcome to Fanstory!
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This is a great first poem! You use a lot of nice, descriptive words. I love when you say, "speckled sun-kisses spread careless up from your wrists." Your poem has a nice flow to it as well. Welcome to Fanstory!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
