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Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Mum's the word"Nefarious Deeds
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
I thought this was well-done in the way of its genre. It was to the point and gave the reader a complete sense of the character of Alma in this short short story. These 100 word flash fiction stories are hard to do. Congratulations on the third place tie! The only suggestion I have is to do the quotations inside quotation marks or else in italics.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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I thought this was well-done in the way of its genre. It was to the point and gave the reader a complete sense of the character of Alma in this short short story. These 100 word flash fiction stories are hard to do. Congratulations on the third place tie! The only suggestion I have is to do the quotations inside quotation marks or else in italics.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thanks for the read, I appreciate the six. They are so shiny. Glad you enjoyed it. Karen
Comment from zanni
oh my goodness, so much resentment captured in 1oo words. Well done in this concise storytelling. I love the horrific detail of the final sentence. Congrats in your contest placement
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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oh my goodness, so much resentment captured in 1oo words. Well done in this concise storytelling. I love the horrific detail of the final sentence. Congrats in your contest placement
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thanks for the read and the nice comments. Karen
Comment from Barry Penfold
Good one Karen. A rather volatile sous chef but perhaps with reasonable cause . Well done on the third placing. Thanks for sharing and take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Good one Karen. A rather volatile sous chef but perhaps with reasonable cause . Well done on the third placing. Thanks for sharing and take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thanks for the read and good wishes. I cook my cornbread in an iron skillet. :-) Karen
Comment from karenina
Yew! So she sliced and diced the corpse and....hmmm...baked it in several pies! (Could I make my interpretation any darker?)
If he gets a next life I bet he shuts his mouth!
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Yew! So she sliced and diced the corpse and....hmmm...baked it in several pies! (Could I make my interpretation any darker?)
If he gets a next life I bet he shuts his mouth!
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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She's not Sweeny Todd. She has an even lovelier garden now.Thanks for the read.
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Oh, thanks. I was going to reference Sweeny Todd, but couldn't think of the name at the time!
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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Oh, this is pure evil, lol! A father and daughter activity? You hit 'em over the head with a skillet, and I'll take care of the evidence:-)
Well, I thought it was pretty clever, and I just happen to have one last "six" tucked away in my back pocket for such an occasion as this.
Good luck in the contest.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Oh, this is pure evil, lol! A father and daughter activity? You hit 'em over the head with a skillet, and I'll take care of the evidence:-)
Well, I thought it was pretty clever, and I just happen to have one last "six" tucked away in my back pocket for such an occasion as this.
Good luck in the contest.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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If you can't rely on family who can you rely on? "Jaba the Gut" should have kept his remarks to himself! Thanks for the six they are so nice and shiny. Karen :-)
Comment from jim vecchio
I'm surprised at you! When I saw the title, I thought this would be about a bunch of pretty flowers. Such violence! Hope I stay on the right side of you! Please don't get men all the way and start writing free verse!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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I'm surprised at you! When I saw the title, I thought this would be about a bunch of pretty flowers. Such violence! Hope I stay on the right side of you! Please don't get men all the way and start writing free verse!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Me? Hearts and flowers? Surely you jest. I write about killing people, humor, and spirit poems. Flowers? I may try and write about Shirley Maclaine though. Thanks for the read. Karen :-)
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I was only joking. I love your writings.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my!! He did ask for it, but probably not the best idea Alma ever had. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Yes, you had characters, setting, problem, and solution all wrapped up in a tidy bundle. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Oh my!! He did ask for it, but probably not the best idea Alma ever had. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Yes, you had characters, setting, problem, and solution all wrapped up in a tidy bundle. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for the read and the nice comments. Karen
Comment from Jim Wile
Of its own accord, huh? Poor Kenneth. If only he could have put up with thicker carrots, he might still be alive today rather than mixed in with the hamburger meat at the butcher's shop.
Fun story, Karen! - Jim
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Of its own accord, huh? Poor Kenneth. If only he could have put up with thicker carrots, he might still be alive today rather than mixed in with the hamburger meat at the butcher's shop.
Fun story, Karen! - Jim
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Good luck with the novel contest Thanks for the read. Karen
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Thanks very much, Karen.
Comment from Begin Again
Lesson taught - Before one decides to hand out an insult, please insure what weapon lies nearby as a retaliation to said insult. Good luck in the contest. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Lesson taught - Before one decides to hand out an insult, please insure what weapon lies nearby as a retaliation to said insult. Good luck in the contest. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Good luck with the contest, Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from kahpot
What an excellent read and ending, the connection of chef and eventually the butcher is wonderful, you have kept the reader intrigued right to the end, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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What an excellent read and ending, the connection of chef and eventually the butcher is wonderful, you have kept the reader intrigued right to the end, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for the read and the nice comments. Karen