Hidden By The Walls
words from MICAH 7: 9-208 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well done for even attempting this difficult challenge, Jim! As ever, your fertile imagination has created another engrossing story (unhampered by those prompt words which fit in there fluently). And, oh dear, another tragic and undeserved ending! An excellent read and a great contender! Good luck! Debbie
Well done for even attempting this difficult challenge, Jim! As ever, your fertile imagination has created another engrossing story (unhampered by those prompt words which fit in there fluently). And, oh dear, another tragic and undeserved ending! An excellent read and a great contender! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
You successfully converted some words from Micah to a noir-feeling detective story. That's a really big change!
I think my favorite word pair is how you used dust feeding in relation to Detective dying. Extremely original.
Well done!
Julie
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
You successfully converted some words from Micah to a noir-feeling detective story. That's a really big change!
I think my favorite word pair is how you used dust feeding in relation to Detective dying. Extremely original.
Well done!
Julie
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you. At first I got a bit nervous when it opened to Micah!
Comment from Esther Brown
That is an interesting way to write. Just pick words and make a story. Confounded spelled wrong? I have been reading the Left Behind series and was just thinking how God sees the heart and not the face we show publicly. Esther
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
That is an interesting way to write. Just pick words and make a story. Confounded spelled wrong? I have been reading the Left Behind series and was just thinking how God sees the heart and not the face we show publicly. Esther
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! I edited it. Somehow, I spelled the word correctly in the story, but the notes were incorrect.
Comment from Daylily
A very interesting tale showing how falling in love can affect our good senses...sometimes with deadly results. Truly, when our hearts are involved, we can ignore what usually would cause us alarm. This is an excellent Roundabout entry, Jim. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
A very interesting tale showing how falling in love can affect our good senses...sometimes with deadly results. Truly, when our hearts are involved, we can ignore what usually would cause us alarm. This is an excellent Roundabout entry, Jim. Best wishes!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you! This was an interesting challenge.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. I'm wondering how many men have fallen for a girl, who only gets them into trouble. LOL Good luck with the contest.
She played it smart and we got to enjoy one another, real good. (comma after smart, you switched subjects & really)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. I'm wondering how many men have fallen for a girl, who only gets them into trouble. LOL Good luck with the contest.
She played it smart and we got to enjoy one another, real good. (comma after smart, you switched subjects & really)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you! I value your suggestions, and will correct now.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
This was a contest I passed on, believing it nearly impossible to write coherently. You proved me wrong.
Except for your cop being so dumb, it was a good story.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
This was a contest I passed on, believing it nearly impossible to write coherently. You proved me wrong.
Except for your cop being so dumb, it was a good story.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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It was the only thing I could come up with! I thought I might pass after I opened to, of all things, Micah.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very interesting story that you have written using those words from the verse in Micah. I enjoyed listening and enjoyed it. It's very moving and it is well written. Have a good day and a good weekend. Patricia .
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
This is a very interesting story that you have written using those words from the verse in Micah. I enjoyed listening and enjoyed it. It's very moving and it is well written. Have a good day and a good weekend. Patricia .
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you and enjoy many blessings!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Entertaining story for the Roundabout writing prompt. This looks very challenging to me. It had the feel of an old time detective film. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
Entertaining story for the Roundabout writing prompt. This looks very challenging to me. It had the feel of an old time detective film. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much! I like challenges! That's my fatal flaw!