He missed.
Realistic suspense3 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing your first post as a contest entry. CONGRATULATIONS!! That's very brave. I enjoyed reading. This entry has all the required elements of a story. Good luck with the contest.
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Thank you for sharing your first post as a contest entry. CONGRATULATIONS!! That's very brave. I enjoyed reading. This entry has all the required elements of a story. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
Comment from aprilyoung29
So intense and I felt like I was there. I will say that your tense moves between past and present. Perhaps look at other ways to phase things such as using terms like "here" and "now" when most other words are past tense. Good luck in the contest!
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So intense and I felt like I was there. I will say that your tense moves between past and present. Perhaps look at other ways to phase things such as using terms like "here" and "now" when most other words are past tense. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry to the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest and a very nice first post. Welcome to Fanstory! I was engaged from the first line and stayed that way until the end. The end was surprising and powerful. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
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An excellent entry to the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest and a very nice first post. Welcome to Fanstory! I was engaged from the first line and stayed that way until the end. The end was surprising and powerful. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
