What We See
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
This was a great chapter Jim. Showing us that you have to go with your gut feelings and tread carefully. I immediately thought about Ugg boots, made in Aus. for decades but not patented and lost the rights to the name when someone else patented the name. People are sneaky when it comes to money as Alan has found out. Good one,
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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This was a great chapter Jim. Showing us that you have to go with your gut feelings and tread carefully. I immediately thought about Ugg boots, made in Aus. for decades but not patented and lost the rights to the name when someone else patented the name. People are sneaky when it comes to money as Alan has found out. Good one,
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Valda. Now we get to see what Alan does about this whole mess. It should be interesting and perhaps dangerous.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Just as we all suspected, Warren was the culprit. Here's where we are. Alan has his data backed up on a hard drive and he has the prototype of the newer glasses. He even has video of the theft and provides the police with contact info for Warren. This is all too easy. Something unexpected is going to happen. Right? Can't wait for the next chapters.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Just as we all suspected, Warren was the culprit. Here's where we are. Alan has his data backed up on a hard drive and he has the prototype of the newer glasses. He even has video of the theft and provides the police with contact info for Warren. This is all too easy. Something unexpected is going to happen. Right? Can't wait for the next chapters.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Right you are. That's all too easy. We're about to get on a rollercoaster ride of ups and downs in the final 8 chapters.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You have it all pulled neatly together in this chapter, every little detail about creepy Warren's dirty deeds. Alan needs to find a way to put Warren in a jail cell.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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You have it all pulled neatly together in this chapter, every little detail about creepy Warren's dirty deeds. Alan needs to find a way to put Warren in a jail cell.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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You know it won't be as straightforward as it might seem at this point. Trust me on that.
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If it is a good story, nothing is simple. That would be boring.
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Exactly so.
Comment from Wendy G
So glad he had the video camera installed, and had it all backed up elsewhere. But the end won't be easy or tidy. I sense this is the start of something worse. Very well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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So glad he had the video camera installed, and had it all backed up elsewhere. But the end won't be easy or tidy. I sense this is the start of something worse. Very well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thanks very much, Wendy. Perceptive as always. A few unanticipated things are coming as we narrow down to the final 8 chapters.
Comment from jmdg1954
So, the first thing I've got to say is that Ginnie certainly knows how to relieve Alan's built tension and get him to relax... what a good wife!
Secondly- nicely dry one with the expletives and comically having Tommy chime in with one! A little out of character for the hook, but you made it work!
Thirdly- let's get the police in here and nail that SOB's black eye to the mat!
Yea baby... looking towards the next chapter.
John
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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So, the first thing I've got to say is that Ginnie certainly knows how to relieve Alan's built tension and get him to relax... what a good wife!
Secondly- nicely dry one with the expletives and comically having Tommy chime in with one! A little out of character for the hook, but you made it work!
Thirdly- let's get the police in here and nail that SOB's black eye to the mat!
Yea baby... looking towards the next chapter.
John
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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We are just at the beginning of a rollercoaster ride as we veer into the final 8 chapters. Not all will be as it seems. Hope you enjoy it, John.
Comment from lancellot
Well, you're seeds of drama have sprouted, but it seems your Main character has also been given all the tools needed to solve this problem at the same time. You've also shown Alan has a support system. So, there is no worry.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Well, you're seeds of drama have sprouted, but it seems your Main character has also been given all the tools needed to solve this problem at the same time. You've also shown Alan has a support system. So, there is no worry.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Don't be too sure of that. All is not as it seems. Plenty of worries to come!
Comment from lyenochka
It's great that Alan was able to capture the theft on video and that will help the police as clear evidence. Plus, he has a full list of items sold. I'm guessing Warren won't be showing up for work. Good use of humor as all three were able to vent by swearing together.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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It's great that Alan was able to capture the theft on video and that will help the police as clear evidence. Plus, he has a full list of items sold. I'm guessing Warren won't be showing up for work. Good use of humor as all three were able to vent by swearing together.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Helen. You understood the swearing exactly as I intended it. We're about to enter a rollercoaster of events that will have both ups and downs. I've laid the groundwork, but I don't think anyone sees what's coming yet.
Comment from T B Botts
Hi Jim,
I can only imagine that when you're dealing with anything out of the ordinary, be it patents, crime or cops, its going to be time consuming and at times frustrating. Part of you has to deal with the inconvenience, while at the same time trying to keep the business running and food on the table. At least Alan has Ginnie to help him through the process, and to take his mind off his troubles, at least for a short bit. Well done Jim.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Hi Jim,
I can only imagine that when you're dealing with anything out of the ordinary, be it patents, crime or cops, its going to be time consuming and at times frustrating. Part of you has to deal with the inconvenience, while at the same time trying to keep the business running and food on the table. At least Alan has Ginnie to help him through the process, and to take his mind off his troubles, at least for a short bit. Well done Jim.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Tom. You're certainly right about all that. This is going to be a rollercoaster ride of ups and downs from now on as we close in on the final 8 chapters.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm glad David/Alan has it all on tape. I sure hope they get to Warren before he sells it. I can't wait to read more.
I went in and sat next to her on the sofa. (sat beside her)
They said they would send a detective out tomorrow afternoon. (why not tomorrow morning?)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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I'm glad David/Alan has it all on tape. I sure hope they get to Warren before he sells it. I can't wait to read more.
I went in and sat next to her on the sofa. (sat beside her)
They said they would send a detective out tomorrow afternoon. (why not tomorrow morning?)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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The fact that he has it on tape will end up being important, but not in the way you may think.
The reason for the afternoon visit by the police was that Warren has an appointment with the patent lawyer in the morning. I didn't really want to waste time on that fact in the story, so I just simplified things by having the police come in the afternoon.
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Warren had the meeting for Alan had the meeting??
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Oops. You're right--Alan had the meeting.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I d k why this chapter reminds me of the challenge Aby faced with those rascal cheating in the match??? and of course, there's the innuendo of primal urges you find a way of mixing in to the storyline.
I look for your releases to read and comment on your submissions, as only I can do. It's easier than buying a book. One chapter at a time.
Hopefully, you find mine captivating. They are different.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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I d k why this chapter reminds me of the challenge Aby faced with those rascal cheating in the match??? and of course, there's the innuendo of primal urges you find a way of mixing in to the storyline.
I look for your releases to read and comment on your submissions, as only I can do. It's easier than buying a book. One chapter at a time.
Hopefully, you find mine captivating. They are different.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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I can kind of see that parallel. In both cases, you've got scoundrels, who are inferior to the protagonists, attempting to best them at their own game.
Glad you're enjoying this story a chapter at a time. Except for a few earlier chapters, I've kind of geared my chapter lengths into "FanStory length" of about 1,200-1,800 words.
I read your most recent post earlier, and I'm working up to a review of it. Kinda like working up to a good shit!
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Should I be offended?
And you meant shift, not ^%$#, right?
Always yours.
