Comment from Y. M. Roger

Good

Tough thing here to tell a story with but 50 words, but you seem to have accomplished such!! I would suggest, perhaps, your word/phrase choice could be a bit less 'choppy'... I like the way your story makes the reader's mind work far beyond your words. Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
With kind regards

Comment from patricia dillon

Excellent

This was an intriguing little story. I was reminded of "Alice in Wonderland," which was my favourite book when I was a child. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work
With kind regards

reply by patricia dillon on 20-Apr-2024

You're welcome

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

well .... what was in the box??? if the elephant was magical, why didn't it pop out of the box?
However, you did get a story into 50 words, which is pretty good, and it's always great to try and see what you can do! Bravo.
Katharine

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work

reply by pome lover on 18-Apr-2024

I was too abrupt. I didn't mean to be unkind. The question just popped into my head, and I just wondered. You got me interested.

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024

Please don't worry. It is always great to get genuine feedback like yours. I appreciate it. Thank you for this message.
With kind regards