Forget-Me-Nots Smile
Tanka9 total reviews
Comment from Val Crisson
Well, I love tanka, it's one of my favorite JSF. Your pivot line "uninhibited" is very good, but without your author's notes I would never have understood your last two lines. Maybe, little more thought to those? Actually, the last line Nonetheless, a very nice tanka
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Well, I love tanka, it's one of my favorite JSF. Your pivot line "uninhibited" is very good, but without your author's notes I would never have understood your last two lines. Maybe, little more thought to those? Actually, the last line Nonetheless, a very nice tanka
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Hi Val,
Thank you for your kind feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These are beautiful flowers and I loved your endearing post Debra. I am sorry for your losses, we suffer grief from time to time and I hope your memories keep these people alive for you. There is a story about this flower, when God was naming all the flowers, this little flower shouted out: "forget me not" and the God then named the flower (Forget me not). It is a quaint and endearing story, just like yours, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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These are beautiful flowers and I loved your endearing post Debra. I am sorry for your losses, we suffer grief from time to time and I hope your memories keep these people alive for you. There is a story about this flower, when God was naming all the flowers, this little flower shouted out: "forget me not" and the God then named the flower (Forget me not). It is a quaint and endearing story, just like yours, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind comments, Dolly :)
Best wishes, Debra x
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice photo and presentation, Debra.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You wrote a very good tanka about it.
-The opening lines establish the premise
and show how the forget-me-nots flourish.
-A good pivot line.
-Very good closing lines with good
personification of memories.
-I am not sure about the meaning in your
notes whether you are referring to loved ones
and friends you have lost or the flowers or both.
-You did a good job with it. It's always
nice to see you on FS.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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-Very nice photo and presentation, Debra.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You wrote a very good tanka about it.
-The opening lines establish the premise
and show how the forget-me-nots flourish.
-A good pivot line.
-Very good closing lines with good
personification of memories.
-I am not sure about the meaning in your
notes whether you are referring to loved ones
and friends you have lost or the flowers or both.
-You did a good job with it. It's always
nice to see you on FS.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Pam :)
I was referring to friends and family - I think it was clear to me but not to anyone else! Must try harder lol
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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You are very welcome, Debra. It wasn't the poem but the notes that were a little unclear.
Comment from Sally Law
Aw, wishing for a six to give today. I just lost the last of my five brothers yesterday. It's just Suzy and me now. My husband and I will be traveling to Georgia soon. Wonderful poem as always and beautifully presented. Sending you my best today as always.
Sal Xoxo
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Aw, wishing for a six to give today. I just lost the last of my five brothers yesterday. It's just Suzy and me now. My husband and I will be traveling to Georgia soon. Wonderful poem as always and beautifully presented. Sending you my best today as always.
Sal Xoxo
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much dear Sal :)
Best wishes to you, Debra xx
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Most welcome. My pleasure, dear Debra. :)))
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
The sweetest of tankas beautifully presented as ever! This enduring little flower - a symbol of love and memories never to be forgotten. Nicely done, Debra! Take care x
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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The sweetest of tankas beautifully presented as ever! This enduring little flower - a symbol of love and memories never to be forgotten. Nicely done, Debra! Take care x
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Debbie :) I appreciate your kind feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well presented, and it is beautiful and its wording. I enjoyed listening to it very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a wonderful week. May God bless you. Patricia
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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This is very well presented, and it is beautiful and its wording. I enjoyed listening to it very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a wonderful week. May God bless you. Patricia
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your feedback, Patricia :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from royowen
I was wondering if they were plants, but perhaps they are people in our lives, the ones that have come and gone, as we all have. This is a marvellous work, Debra, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : unfertilised (foilage) foliage?
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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I was wondering if they were plants, but perhaps they are people in our lives, the ones that have come and gone, as we all have. This is a marvellous work, Debra, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : unfertilised (foilage) foliage?
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Roy, for your kind feedback and for picking up on my spelling :) Sorted now!
Best wishes, Debra
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Pleasure Debra
Comment from lyenochka
For all those whom you live and will never forget, this is a lovely tanka! I wish you added to the contest. I find the persistent nature of forgetmenot flowers annoying but they are fragrant and spread freely like the memories of those we have lost and still love.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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For all those whom you live and will never forget, this is a lovely tanka! I wish you added to the contest. I find the persistent nature of forgetmenot flowers annoying but they are fragrant and spread freely like the memories of those we have lost and still love.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Helen :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Mark Jackson
I didn't understand this at first, I read it and it seemed like a grammar error, then I saw you note and I thought; wow. This is wonderful, I have heard of the flowers but never thought of them as an aid memoir. Fantastic writing.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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I didn't understand this at first, I read it and it seemed like a grammar error, then I saw you note and I thought; wow. This is wonderful, I have heard of the flowers but never thought of them as an aid memoir. Fantastic writing.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you :)
Best wishes, Debra
