Panpipes
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19 total reviews
Comment from phill doran
Great work Tony,
Lots on (unexpected) action in this part, and very well handled too. The 'violence' caution wasn't really needed, I think. A very well-paced and tight end result.
(A clever detail (or the writer's habit) is that she is handed a biro, rather than a pen...)
SPaG-less as far as this eye can see...
I wish you well with this unfolding tale.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Great work Tony,
Lots on (unexpected) action in this part, and very well handled too. The 'violence' caution wasn't really needed, I think. A very well-paced and tight end result.
(A clever detail (or the writer's habit) is that she is handed a biro, rather than a pen...)
SPaG-less as far as this eye can see...
I wish you well with this unfolding tale.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Phill. I appreciate your continued interest and generous stars. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from GoWiSt
"What seems to be the matter here" A question mark is needed after here.
"she changed tack" Does 'tack' mean tactics?
Wow, an arm washing up on shore after its body's burial? Intriguing.
Interesting story, with unfortunate Aysha getting robbed and rushing about for aid. Wonder what her Major friend can readily do to help.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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"What seems to be the matter here" A question mark is needed after here.
"she changed tack" Does 'tack' mean tactics?
Wow, an arm washing up on shore after its body's burial? Intriguing.
Interesting story, with unfortunate Aysha getting robbed and rushing about for aid. Wonder what her Major friend can readily do to help.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Many thanks for taking the time to review this chapter. I appreciate your comments and particularly your sharp eye. No one else noticed that missing question mark.
The idiom 'changing tack' derives from the sailing expression, where to change tack is to change direction so that the wind shifts from one side of the vessel to the other.
All good wishes, Tony
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
Ah, the game is afoot. Or at least an endless list of obstacles are afoot, delaying Ayesha at every turn.
So, Runrot's son kidnaps and robs Ayesha at knife point (and appears to have her ATM code). I guess he's not on very good terms with his father.
It appears Thailand is a caldron of corruption (much like the rest of the world).
The evidence is incontrovertible unless, of course, it wasn't his body she identified or someone stole the ring. A tragedy of errors is about to unfold on Ayesha.
I think she is afloat in a tank of hungry sharks. So who come forth to be her savior?
Time will tell, or maybe not.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Hello Tony,
Ah, the game is afoot. Or at least an endless list of obstacles are afoot, delaying Ayesha at every turn.
So, Runrot's son kidnaps and robs Ayesha at knife point (and appears to have her ATM code). I guess he's not on very good terms with his father.
It appears Thailand is a caldron of corruption (much like the rest of the world).
The evidence is incontrovertible unless, of course, it wasn't his body she identified or someone stole the ring. A tragedy of errors is about to unfold on Ayesha.
I think she is afloat in a tank of hungry sharks. So who come forth to be her savior?
Time will tell, or maybe not.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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What a web I'm weaving. Thank you for bedewing it with stars. It is nearly finished, or so I keep thinking.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Things are not going well for Ayesha. I can't remember Kamul from before, if he appeared, but I hope he is more honest than his predecessor. Life is certainly complex for Ayesha, and I fear she is in a lot of danger as she has claimed so much money, some of which probably belongs to one or more of the other criminals with whom her dead husband associated.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Things are not going well for Ayesha. I can't remember Kamul from before, if he appeared, but I hope he is more honest than his predecessor. Life is certainly complex for Ayesha, and I fear she is in a lot of danger as she has claimed so much money, some of which probably belongs to one or more of the other criminals with whom her dead husband associated.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thanks for your continued interest and support, Carol. Yes, Kamul appeared a few times in earlier chapters as an unwilling lieutenant to his predecessor.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Poor Ayesha, what a horrible experience. It's an stressful situation... I even feel it by reading about it. I hope she finds who is behind the attack and is able to cancel the card. The cell phone probably has a lot of personal information.
Well done, Tony, I enjoyed this chapter.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Poor Ayesha, what a horrible experience. It's an stressful situation... I even feel it by reading about it. I hope she finds who is behind the attack and is able to cancel the card. The cell phone probably has a lot of personal information.
Well done, Tony, I enjoyed this chapter.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Gypsy. Let's hope he can't get into the cell phone. I suspect he only took it to stop her from calling the police until he had time to get away.
Comment from royowen
The story is becoming rather exciting, Ayesha, being accosted and robbed of her credit card and phone, is trying to cancel her card and retrieve her phone, the bank manager wasn't terribly helpful, and she tries to see Major Kabul, but she's being deterred by the impassive desk sergeant, well done Tony, great post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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The story is becoming rather exciting, Ayesha, being accosted and robbed of her credit card and phone, is trying to cancel her card and retrieve her phone, the bank manager wasn't terribly helpful, and she tries to see Major Kabul, but she's being deterred by the impassive desk sergeant, well done Tony, great post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Many thanks for your summary comments, Roy. Appreciated.
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
Whew! I was hoping that Ayesha would have used some defense maneuvers to fight off Chanin but perhaps for the plot line you needed a crime to get Ayesha to talk to Major Kamul. I wonder how much she will uncover about her husband's illegal business. Great chapter!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Whew! I was hoping that Ayesha would have used some defense maneuvers to fight off Chanin but perhaps for the plot line you needed a crime to get Ayesha to talk to Major Kamul. I wonder how much she will uncover about her husband's illegal business. Great chapter!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Helen. You're reading my mind. LOL
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Lol. Well, if that's the case, then you know I'm following your book closely!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This thriller has set into motion several different plots that twist and turn throughout the tale. I have to admit that this particular chapter was difficult to follow as I read through this post it became convoluted to the point of distracting me from what was being said between the two main characters.
I also noted the print size was not as easy to read this time for some reason beyond my control. Otherwise, I love the thrill of the dynamics of this twisted plot. Thanks for keeping me amused and entertained.
Jesse
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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This thriller has set into motion several different plots that twist and turn throughout the tale. I have to admit that this particular chapter was difficult to follow as I read through this post it became convoluted to the point of distracting me from what was being said between the two main characters.
I also noted the print size was not as easy to read this time for some reason beyond my control. Otherwise, I love the thrill of the dynamics of this twisted plot. Thanks for keeping me amused and entertained.
Jesse
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thanks for your review, Jesse. Sorry this wasn't so easy to read. The font and size were the same as usual, so that's a bit of a conundrum.
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I think it is my eyesight that has given me problems. I need to call my eye doctor and make another appointment to see what is happening.
Wish me luck.
Jesse
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I hope all goes well.
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Thanks. Me too.
Comment from estory
This chapter packs a little more action. Suddenly, out of nowhere, Aeysha gets swept away by this knife wielding thug who sticks a knife under her throat and steals her bank card and phone. She thinks pretty well on her feet, though, and gets away and alerts the bank. Brisk dialogue makes this come alive. And now we have a new monkey wrench in the plot. More suspense is building. estory
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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This chapter packs a little more action. Suddenly, out of nowhere, Aeysha gets swept away by this knife wielding thug who sticks a knife under her throat and steals her bank card and phone. She thinks pretty well on her feet, though, and gets away and alerts the bank. Brisk dialogue makes this come alive. And now we have a new monkey wrench in the plot. More suspense is building. estory
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thanks for your review, estory, and comments about the rising action.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Ayesha is having a difficult time. I have a feeling this may be how Steve gets back in her life. It would come full circle then. I can't wait to see what happens next. This is a very good write.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Ayesha is having a difficult time. I have a feeling this may be how Steve gets back in her life. It would come full circle then. I can't wait to see what happens next. This is a very good write.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thanks for your review, Barbara. Appreciated, as always.
