It's Like Magic!
Powerful Effect10 total reviews
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written poem. Lovely photo choice to compliment your words as well. Nice overall presentation and font colour. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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This is a nicely written poem. Lovely photo choice to compliment your words as well. Nice overall presentation and font colour. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review and good luck wish.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh so true, if we do good deeds and smile, then not only do we make ourselves happier, but we make others happy too. It's a great deal. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Oh so true, if we do good deeds and smile, then not only do we make ourselves happier, but we make others happy too. It's a great deal. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Julie Helms
This is just such great advice, applicable to anyone, anywhere, in any time period. It's like a universal truth!
I saw someone commented on the meter. I think what might be the issue, is that your lines are technically matching (you've got matching internal and end rhyme, matching syllable and word count) but 'weed out' is most naturally read as a unit, but your arrangement forces a break there to match 'deed, with'. So someone not anticipating the meter scheme won't read in it a rhyming way. (I'm not sure that made sense. It's really a nuance).
Great poem and picture to start my day with!
Julie
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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This is just such great advice, applicable to anyone, anywhere, in any time period. It's like a universal truth!
I saw someone commented on the meter. I think what might be the issue, is that your lines are technically matching (you've got matching internal and end rhyme, matching syllable and word count) but 'weed out' is most naturally read as a unit, but your arrangement forces a break there to match 'deed, with'. So someone not anticipating the meter scheme won't read in it a rhyming way. (I'm not sure that made sense. It's really a nuance).
Great poem and picture to start my day with!
Julie
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Hmm! Your thoughtful comments make sense on the meter issue, and I see what you mean. Thanks so much for your kind and constructively critical review.
Comment from gansach
Couldn't resist reading this one--the artwork caught my eye since I love bees. The message is short, sweet, and very true. A simple act of kindness can grow and multiply like magic weeding out the negative. Very good effort. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Couldn't resist reading this one--the artwork caught my eye since I love bees. The message is short, sweet, and very true. A simple act of kindness can grow and multiply like magic weeding out the negative. Very good effort. Best wishes!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your kind review and good luck wish!
Comment from lyenochka
That's great advice! Yes, and sometimes a reassuring smile alone will bless. But a good deed, too, could really reach someone and cast out the "bile." Great job with your essence poem! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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That's great advice! Yes, and sometimes a reassuring smile alone will bless. But a good deed, too, could really reach someone and cast out the "bile." Great job with your essence poem! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your kind review and good luck wish.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very good 29 porn for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a very pleasant weekend and may God bless you with all good things. Patricia .
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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This is a very good 29 porn for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a very pleasant weekend and may God bless you with all good things. Patricia .
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, pat. God bless you, too!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You might try "Arrears "next. You are good at these little babies. I am bingeing on "Blacklist" again. I may post tomorrow. Weather is getting warmer around here. I am moving to Plano, Texas where my two younger sisters live, and my older sister lives 30 minutes away in Dallas. I will be able to play games again.Yippee!!!! Karen
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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You might try "Arrears "next. You are good at these little babies. I am bingeing on "Blacklist" again. I may post tomorrow. Weather is getting warmer around here. I am moving to Plano, Texas where my two younger sisters live, and my older sister lives 30 minutes away in Dallas. I will be able to play games again.Yippee!!!! Karen
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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So glad for/with you for your imminent move! Hope you have loads of fun with your sisters! Thanks for the kind review.
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Thank you:-)
Comment from isabelteeth
very cute, and so true! i love the message and i feel like a little happy bee now. i feel like there's something more i want in the meter of it but maybe i am being silly. super nice poem!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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very cute, and so true! i love the message and i feel like a little happy bee now. i feel like there's something more i want in the meter of it but maybe i am being silly. super nice poem!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your review. Can you elaborate on what more you want in the meter? It's an essence poem.
Comment from jessizero
This was a great two line poem for the contest. You got the internal and ending rhymes, as required, and I like your picture paired with the word "weed." It works very well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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This was a great two line poem for the contest. You got the internal and ending rhymes, as required, and I like your picture paired with the word "weed." It works very well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Ulla
Absolutely true. I couldn't agree more. I know that very well. A good deed will certainly weed out the bile. I wish you all the best in the upcoming contest. Ulla
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Absolutely true. I couldn't agree more. I know that very well. A good deed will certainly weed out the bile. I wish you all the best in the upcoming contest. Ulla
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thanks for your review. Can you suggest any edits to improve it?
