Willing Hearts
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Chapter 10 B"Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Appears Noah got embarrassed when Sami caught him sizing her up.
Sami does all that exercise five days a week? Paints an illusion of the shape she must be in.
A hit put out on Morgan deepens the plot of the story.
Noah does need to remain professional at all times and place his raging hormones aside somewhere.
In Notes "broke it in to two sections" should be broke it into two sections.
I edit what I write all the time. Occasionally, too much. Never truly satisfied with my penning and believe what I have written can always be improved.
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Appears Noah got embarrassed when Sami caught him sizing her up.
Sami does all that exercise five days a week? Paints an illusion of the shape she must be in.
A hit put out on Morgan deepens the plot of the story.
Noah does need to remain professional at all times and place his raging hormones aside somewhere.
In Notes "broke it in to two sections" should be broke it into two sections.
I edit what I write all the time. Occasionally, too much. Never truly satisfied with my penning and believe what I have written can always be improved.
Comment Written 09-May-2024
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Thank you for the help. I always appreciate your review.
Comment from Daylily
It is easy to see why this chapter made first place for All Time Best for April. It provides a lot of information while moving along quickly. The touch of romance figures into that, as well. :-)
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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It is easy to see why this chapter made first place for All Time Best for April. It provides a lot of information while moving along quickly. The touch of romance figures into that, as well. :-)
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement. Sorry you had to read it with no money attached.
Comment from forestport12
Appreciate your ability to capture so much emotion and move the plot with dialogue. It inspires me to refocus how best to apply dialogue when it can put the reader in the moment, a way of presenting present tense to the plot.
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Appreciate your ability to capture so much emotion and move the plot with dialogue. It inspires me to refocus how best to apply dialogue when it can put the reader in the moment, a way of presenting present tense to the plot.
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate what you said. I have a reviewer who says I don't show enough emotion.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You are moving the story nicely. I make changes every time I read one of my writings. As writers, we want our writing to be perfect.
I fell and had a compression fracture at L1. It was very painful. So, I did not get on fanstory. I am much better now.
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. You are moving the story nicely. I make changes every time I read one of my writings. As writers, we want our writing to be perfect.
I fell and had a compression fracture at L1. It was very painful. So, I did not get on fanstory. I am much better now.
Comment Written 04-May-2024
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the support.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Don't feel alone, I edit or revise lots of work I've written while posting and proofreading. It is part of the writing process before it's finalized. I have to catch up on this story. I will do some backreading. I hope the run is worthwhile in this story. Sex trafficking is an awful thing.
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Don't feel alone, I edit or revise lots of work I've written while posting and proofreading. It is part of the writing process before it's finalized. I have to catch up on this story. I will do some backreading. I hope the run is worthwhile in this story. Sex trafficking is an awful thing.
Comment Written 02-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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It will come in handy later. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jacob1395
The pace in this chapter was excellent Barbara and your dialogue flowed really well. It does seem that there is something more going on between Noah and Sami and I hope they do have the chance to pursue a relationship. Another enjoyable chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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The pace in this chapter was excellent Barbara and your dialogue flowed really well. It does seem that there is something more going on between Noah and Sami and I hope they do have the chance to pursue a relationship. Another enjoyable chapter.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I hope they are able to pursue their relationship, or I don't have a novel. LOL
Comment from Sanku
Church dance ending in senior citizens travelogue was the best news and it brought smiles. The irate Chen now wants Noah alias Trey dead or alive..The plot is getting thicker...
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Church dance ending in senior citizens travelogue was the best news and it brought smiles. The irate Chen now wants Noah alias Trey dead or alive..The plot is getting thicker...
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, This is another very good chapter you have penned. I liked when Sami and Noah were nice to each other. I think they would make a cute couple when it can happen. Great descriptive words and great dialogue. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Barbara, This is another very good chapter you have penned. I liked when Sami and Noah were nice to each other. I think they would make a cute couple when it can happen. Great descriptive words and great dialogue. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I hope they make a great couple. LOL
Comment from royowen
Fancy that, Chen is into all these terrible things and offers a reward into and revealing who and where Trey Morgan is. A great episode Barbara. I love the fact that Sami kissed Noah, despite the fact he is restrained from doing the same, but we know the end from the beginning, well done Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Fancy that, Chen is into all these terrible things and offers a reward into and revealing who and where Trey Morgan is. A great episode Barbara. I love the fact that Sami kissed Noah, despite the fact he is restrained from doing the same, but we know the end from the beginning, well done Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome Barbara
Comment from Douglas Goff
I would like a blueberry muffin. Or two.
So this was very long, but a great ring. I enjoyed the realistic banter/dialogue.
The characters are moving along on a certain path.
Good stuff.
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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I would like a blueberry muffin. Or two.
So this was very long, but a great ring. I enjoyed the realistic banter/dialogue.
The characters are moving along on a certain path.
Good stuff.
D
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
