Cool Melt
Bob Marley playing in the background18 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Flash Fiction story you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work and your words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2024
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This is a very well written Flash Fiction story you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work and your words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 30-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much, Teri.
Comment from Stephen Wendt
WOW! I really enjoy twists at the ends of stories. Enjoying life, enjoying a day, enjoying everything and doing it even more so because you never know when it could be your last day. As a two times cancer survivor, I wish you the best if this story is true.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2024
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WOW! I really enjoy twists at the ends of stories. Enjoying life, enjoying a day, enjoying everything and doing it even more so because you never know when it could be your last day. As a two times cancer survivor, I wish you the best if this story is true.
Comment Written 30-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2024
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Biggest of congratulations for beating the cancer TWICE, Stephen! Mine is a pure piece of fiction, fortunately. Thank you kindly for your review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I happen to be a Bob Marley fan, go figure! This is very well written, and I enjoyed reading. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I happen to be a Bob Marley fan, go figure! This is very well written, and I enjoyed reading. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2024
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Thank you kindly for the review, Barbara.
Comment from royowen
What a tragic story, and yet full of wisdom and truth, there is really only one way to believe when one is facing one's own demise in the face. This is beautifully written my friend, blessings and good luck, Roy
reply by the author on 29-May-2024
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What a tragic story, and yet full of wisdom and truth, there is really only one way to believe when one is facing one's own demise in the face. This is beautifully written my friend, blessings and good luck, Roy
Comment Written 29-May-2024
reply by the author on 29-May-2024
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Thank you dearly, Roy. Sending my best.
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Bless you
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The scene you set sounds like heaven on earth. Or you have been visiting with Jimmy Buffett. Your last line makes for a very different picture. I will pray for a cure for you, or maybe you will find Margaritaville in heaven.
reply by the author on 29-May-2024
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The scene you set sounds like heaven on earth. Or you have been visiting with Jimmy Buffett. Your last line makes for a very different picture. I will pray for a cure for you, or maybe you will find Margaritaville in heaven.
Comment Written 28-May-2024
reply by the author on 29-May-2024
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Thankfuly, it's just fiction, Carol, so no need to prayers. Thank you kindly for the review and the six stars.
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You did a great job of making it seem real. That's the mark of a good writer.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Wow. You surprised me at the end. Your story is well written and interesting. I like the way you set up the story. Good luck in the contest. Great job
reply by the author on 28-May-2024
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Wow. You surprised me at the end. Your story is well written and interesting. I like the way you set up the story. Good luck in the contest. Great job
Comment Written 28-May-2024
reply by the author on 28-May-2024
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Thank you, Brenda
Comment from phill doran
This is very good Bruce,
It is tight (and exactly 150-words) but there's an instant and sustained atmosphere that forms a great counter-point to the 'reveal'.
Unsophisticated and direct, an easy read, but surely not an easy write.
The contests are a lottery at times, I wish you well with yours but as I say, this is very good regardless of how it turns out.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 28-May-2024
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This is very good Bruce,
It is tight (and exactly 150-words) but there's an instant and sustained atmosphere that forms a great counter-point to the 'reveal'.
Unsophisticated and direct, an easy read, but surely not an easy write.
The contests are a lottery at times, I wish you well with yours but as I say, this is very good regardless of how it turns out.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 28-May-2024
reply by the author on 28-May-2024
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Regardless of the contest's outcome, what I appreciate the most are reviews such as this, Phil. Thank you very much.
Comment from jessizero
I thought this was a great portrait in time until I got to that last part. You did a great job setting the scene then pulling off that surprise ending. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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I thought this was a great portrait in time until I got to that last part. You did a great job setting the scene then pulling off that surprise ending. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 27-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for reading it, Jessi
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sometimes in life, sadly, it takes the worst thing possible to make us realize that all the other annoyances and inconveniences are just a normal part of living. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Sometimes in life, sadly, it takes the worst thing possible to make us realize that all the other annoyances and inconveniences are just a normal part of living. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thanks for reading, Ric
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
"I was even grateful for the seagulls . . ."
What a wonderful write this is, and so, so true. Having a disease in your body that can kill you makes you appreciate every thing in life.
This is a subject that has been written many times, but you do it in such a skillful way that it seems brand new. You show us a man who is perfectly happy with his life, then you tell us it's ending.
Love the last sentence.
I always look forward to reading your work, Bruce. But I repeat myself . . .
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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"I was even grateful for the seagulls . . ."
What a wonderful write this is, and so, so true. Having a disease in your body that can kill you makes you appreciate every thing in life.
This is a subject that has been written many times, but you do it in such a skillful way that it seems brand new. You show us a man who is perfectly happy with his life, then you tell us it's ending.
Love the last sentence.
I always look forward to reading your work, Bruce. But I repeat myself . . .
xo
Pam
Comment Written 27-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you so much for the review and six stars, Pam. I aimed to be careful knowing how overused the cancer card is.
