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Observing from the ocean floor

An analogy to help with practicing mindfulness

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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I would love to dive down to the ocean floor. I understand that parts of it are so deep that I can't. I think it would be beautiful. I enjoyed reading your entry and wish you luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
    Thanks very much for taking the time to provide your feedback! Take good care!
Comment from June Sargent
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To quietly observe - that is wisdom and a means of survival in a world of chaos. Find that place of peace and anchor yourself - let the turbulence pass over us. Great free verse with deep sentiments.

 Comment Written 29-May-2024


reply by the author on 29-May-2024
    Thanks very much for taking the time to read my poem and write this thoughtful review.
reply by the author on 29-May-2024
    Thanks very much for taking the time to read my poem and write this thoughtful review.
reply by the author on 29-May-2024
    Thanks very much for taking the time to read my poem and write this thoughtful review.
Comment from bob cullen
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What a delightful and thought-provoking picture you present. The bottom of the ocean. Looking up at a world so far above. So imaginative. I see your inspiration, I must look that up.
I love how you have written this. It really grabbed my attention. I look forward to reading more of your work.

 Comment Written 29-May-2024


reply by the author on 29-May-2024
    Thank you so much, your review made my day!
reply by the author on 29-May-2024
    Thank you so much, your review made my day!
reply by the author on 29-May-2024
    Thank you so much, your review made my day!
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi, Lindsey

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.!

I certainly hope you didn't drown. My husband almost drowned once and he said it was a pleasant experience. When they pulled him out of the water, he was angry because he was having so much fun, drowning.

But, if one could stay on the bottom of the ocean floor, it would be serene and peaceful if you didn't drown

You are right It would be almost impossible to stay on the bottom except in a submarine.

I found your poem very serene and peaceful. You captured the feeling!! Very good

Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 28-May-2024


reply by the author on 29-May-2024
    Thank you so much for taking the time to read it and write this thoughtful post. The author who inspired the poem sits on the ocean floor while scuba diving. The idea of drowning has always terrified me so I find it comforting to hear that he found it to be pleasant (just in case - we never know!). Take care and thanks again!
reply by the author on 29-May-2024
    Thank you so much for taking the time to read it and write this thoughtful post. The author who inspired the poem sits on the ocean floor while scuba diving. The idea of drowning has always terrified me so I find it comforting to hear that he found it to be pleasant (just in case - we never know!). Take care and thanks again!
reply by the author on 29-May-2024
    Thank you so much for taking the time to read it and write this thoughtful post. The author who inspired the poem sits on the ocean floor while scuba diving. The idea of drowning has always terrified me so I find it comforting to hear that he found it to be pleasant (just in case - we never know!). Take care and thanks again!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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Your writing is so beautiful. I love the imagery. What stood out was sitting on the ocean floor and feeling the weight of your bones. Wow! That is so powerful. Your poem is so skillfully written. Great job.

 Comment Written 28-May-2024


reply by the author on 28-May-2024
    Thank you so much for this positive review, you made my day! I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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I can understand and relate to this. I'm always reading and learning how I can slow down and be mindful and it the moment. This is well written and presented. Thank you for sharing it.
Best wishes, Alex

 Comment Written 28-May-2024


reply by the author on 28-May-2024
    Thanks so much for reading it and writing a review! I just love the concept of our thoughts and emotions being the surface of the water - subject to hurricanes as well as calm and peaceful times, but no matter what the bottom of the ocean is always serene.
Comment from bonespur
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I enjoyed this free verse poem. Sometimes it makes a world of difference if you step back and just observe what's going on around you. You can learn a lot as well. Good job and good luck. Have a blessed day

 Comment Written 28-May-2024


reply by the author on 28-May-2024
    Thank you! I agree and I feel it?s important to observe not just what is happening around you but also within you. This is about keeping thoughts and emotions at the surface of the ocean (where there may be big storms and waves) but keeping your core self safe and calm at the bottom. Thank you for reading and responding to my work!
reply by bonespur on 28-May-2024
    You are very welcome. Have a great day.
reply by bonespur on 30-May-2024