You Took the Wind
And Never Knew31 total reviews
Comment from Jim Wile
Some complex themes here in this beautiful, haunting poem, Jess. I take it that it's somewhat biographical about you and your sister, and it sounds like you hold on to some guilt to this day.
Sadly, it's probably a common story when the younger child's star doesn't shine quite as brightly as the older child's. It won't necessarily have the same result as it did in your situation, but there can be many powerful emotions at work, regardless.
Knowing your story, I worry a little bit about my two young grandsons who resemble the situation in some ways. - Jim
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Some complex themes here in this beautiful, haunting poem, Jess. I take it that it's somewhat biographical about you and your sister, and it sounds like you hold on to some guilt to this day.
Sadly, it's probably a common story when the younger child's star doesn't shine quite as brightly as the older child's. It won't necessarily have the same result as it did in your situation, but there can be many powerful emotions at work, regardless.
Knowing your story, I worry a little bit about my two young grandsons who resemble the situation in some ways. - Jim
Comment Written 06-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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I appreciate this so much, Jim.
I understand what you mean, and I sometimes worry about my own girls. If I remember correctly, they are about the same age as your grandsons. But take comfort in knowing there were many other contributing factors.
Thank you for your wonderful thoughts, as always. OH! And happy belated Father?s Day!!!!!!
Xo
Jess
Comment from tfawcus
Absolutely marvellous, Jessica. I wish I had a six left for it. Emotionally intense, technically perfect, and full of artfully woven poetic devices. A tour de force.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Absolutely marvellous, Jessica. I wish I had a six left for it. Emotionally intense, technically perfect, and full of artfully woven poetic devices. A tour de force.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much!!! :) xoxo
Comment from rspoet
Hello Jessica,
A splendid poem, one of your best.
When it comes from the heart it soars.
Beautiful imagery and wonderful circle
back to image of touching the sun.
Perhaps she did know, and smiles even now.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Hello Jessica,
A splendid poem, one of your best.
When it comes from the heart it soars.
Beautiful imagery and wonderful circle
back to image of touching the sun.
Perhaps she did know, and smiles even now.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Robert, thank you so much for your beautiful review! Xo
Comment from Aussie
Your poem touched my soul. I loved the presentation and the subject was alive. The combination of love and care then finally death, is real. The taking of the wind reminds me of the the song "You are the wind beneath my wings." Well done. K xx
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Your poem touched my soul. I loved the presentation and the subject was alive. The combination of love and care then finally death, is real. The taking of the wind reminds me of the the song "You are the wind beneath my wings." Well done. K xx
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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K, thank you so much for your insightful review. That song was the inspiration behind this piece! Xo
Jess
Comment from nancyjam
Jessica, this is such a poignant piece, so touching and heartfelt,
beautifully rhymed with lovely imagery. I don't know who you are writing about but I'm assuming it's someone close to you. If that is the case I offer my deep condolences for you loss.
Thank you for sharing. Nancy
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Jessica, this is such a poignant piece, so touching and heartfelt,
beautifully rhymed with lovely imagery. I don't know who you are writing about but I'm assuming it's someone close to you. If that is the case I offer my deep condolences for you loss.
Thank you for sharing. Nancy
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Nancy, thank you so much for your kindness and wonderful review! Xoxoxo
Jess
Comment from Pam (respa)
Lovely artwork and poem to go with it, Jess. Effective imagery and rhyme. A very good beginning as you tell us about someone who stay close beneath your wings. You ask a very good question mid-way through the poem about whether or not you walked too fast.
Things begin to shift as you watched "each step until your last." You do a great job with the images of light and shadow. The two closing couplets are beautifully written. The whole poem is a dedication to this special person that is written beautifully. Thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Lovely artwork and poem to go with it, Jess. Effective imagery and rhyme. A very good beginning as you tell us about someone who stay close beneath your wings. You ask a very good question mid-way through the poem about whether or not you walked too fast.
Things begin to shift as you watched "each step until your last." You do a great job with the images of light and shadow. The two closing couplets are beautifully written. The whole poem is a dedication to this special person that is written beautifully. Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Pam, that means the world. Thank you so much for your kindness and this wonderful review!
Xoxo
Jess
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You are very welcome and deserving, Jess.
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
What a beautiful poem! It is well written with lots of feeling. I especially love poems that use nature. Thanks for sharing this, and congrats on being recognized
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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What a beautiful poem! It is well written with lots of feeling. I especially love poems that use nature. Thanks for sharing this, and congrats on being recognized
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Jodi, thank you so much!
Xoxo
Jess
Comment from dragonpoet
HI Jessica,
This is a love poem about a person whose love kept behind her to make her strong and hopeful. It is sad that he died and left her cold and hopeless. it seems. But the memories are still there.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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HI Jessica,
This is a love poem about a person whose love kept behind her to make her strong and hopeful. It is sad that he died and left her cold and hopeless. it seems. But the memories are still there.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much, Joan!
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You are most kindly welcome, Jessica.
Joan
Comment from Neonewman
Beautifully crafted piece with a wonderful flow.
You told me once you'd chase the dawn
to watch me touch the sun. Heartfelt line.
Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Beautifully crafted piece with a wonderful flow.
You told me once you'd chase the dawn
to watch me touch the sun. Heartfelt line.
Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Steve,
Thank you so much for your kind words!
Jess
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My pleasure.
Comment from Begin Again
Losing someone we love and feel a part of is difficult in itself, but losing a sibling or a child is almost unbearable. Your words are perfect and brought me to tears, especially at the end when I thought of my son. Thank you for sharing.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Losing someone we love and feel a part of is difficult in itself, but losing a sibling or a child is almost unbearable. Your words are perfect and brought me to tears, especially at the end when I thought of my son. Thank you for sharing.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much, Carol. My heart goes out to you!!!
Xoxo
Jess