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Willing Hearts

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Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?

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Comment from lyenochka
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The plot continues to thicken and perhaps Sami has a great lead with her former student. I wonder what Galvin is up to, trying to run with Sami. I personally would up the distance for the charity run. Even a wimp like me can do a 5K that's only 3 miles. I think people like Sami who is athletic, could easily run a 10K which is 6 miles. Something that requires training for someone like her would be a half marathon. It's up to you as 5K would be attainable for people just participating for charities. It just wouldn't need any extra training for someone like Sami.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
    Yes, 5K isn't that far, but it seems to happen more often. I do think I'll switch it though. Thank you for the kind review. I'm sorry you had to read it when no money was attached.
reply by lyenochka on 29-Jun-2024
    I didn't want to miss a chapter! 💞
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
    I really appreciate it. HUGS!!!
Comment from Daylily
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Sorry I am late getting to this...it is as excellent as usual. I especially enjoyed the little bits of humor. That is a good talent for any writer to have. Smiles, Lily

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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"days' worth" should be day's worth since meaning only one day.

Noah and Sami putting their hot-to-trots on the back burner probably a good idea.

Seems Sami has intentions of getting away from the safehouse one way or another and using her Mateo connection to do so.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
    Thank you for the catch. I have made the correction. I appreciate the help.
Comment from T B Botts
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Hello Barbara,
so she was with this guy every day for four years? I don't doubt that Noah is starting to wonder about the kind of relationship they shared. It would cause jealousy to rear it's head in any red blooded male. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
    Noah is jealous. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Sounds like Noah has a reason to get jealous. Although I don't think Dami is the type of girl who would fall for smooth BS.

Anyways, great job on the dialogue. I think it was very realistic to the situation.

Fun book!
D

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
    Sami hasn't fallen for him, and yes Noah is jealous. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
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A well written and edited chapter. Everything seems to be in accordance with your writing style and the characters are all very nice and polite people in these scenes. Sami is as expected and is treated respectfully.


 Comment Written 26-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
    Thank you for the kind review. I've been worried about you. You haven't been around for a while. I hope you were simply busy and nothing more serious.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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This is a very interesting twist. Noah has smoke coming out of his ears already. Sami is blooming.
Life goes on while you do other things. Good strong writing I have come to depend on. All out of sixes already, sorry. Keep your fingers crossed I get final approval soon on my new home. :-) Karen

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
    I'll do better than fingers crossed. I'll pray. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Hi Barbara,
Another nice chapter in Sami's journey to bring justice.

In the first part of the chapter, we see Noah and Sami exploring their relationship. They aren't ignoring the fact they have feelings for each other, but they don't want to act on them at this time. They realize the announcement of the relationship will make it harder to stay objective.

The second part of the chapter finds Sami wanting to go for a run. She asks Noah, but he's busy on a report. His boss Galvin offers to escort her instead.

In the third part of the chapter, we find Sami putting poor Galvin through his paces, only to be rescued by a much more fit Noah after a bit. Then, Sami talks Noah into letting her bathe Jasper outside his window. I think she's starting to run the show, lol.


4th section, Sami returns from bathing Jasper to overhear the men talking about needed someone undercover to help, but someone already out there, not a new person they would have to invent. Sami says she knows someone.

Section 5, enter a new man into the equation, a rich ex acquaintance of hers, perhaps an old sweetheart??? At any rate, you've pointed out that he will be important to your story. We'll have to watch for him.

Great job,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
    Yes, and Noah is acknowledging that Sami has him wrapped around his finger. I wonder how he's going to handle this. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 25-Jun-2024
    I meant to point that out, too! It was a pivotal revelation.
Comment from Teri7
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This is another great chapter you have penned. Each chapter is more and more interesting. I am excited about Mateo coming on board. Thanks for sharing! Waiting for the next one! love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
    Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
reply by Teri7 on 25-Jun-2024
    You are so welcome!!!
Comment from GoWiSt
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Ha! Is Noah jealous of Mateo, and how close he'd been to Sami. And he's handsome and rich, too--wooh! How can I compete with that, Noah's probably wondering to himself.
Another interesting episode. Awaiting the next install...

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
    Especially when Noah struggles showing feelings. Oh my!! Thank you for the kind review.
reply by GoWiSt on 25-Jun-2024
    You're an excellent writer, Barbs--and very cute, too. :-))
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
    LOL Thank you.
reply by GoWiSt on 25-Jun-2024
    I think I'll be dropping by to say 'Hi' more often (but really just to gaze at your lovely face). :-))
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
    My mama warned me about sweet talkers. LOL I honestly do hope you drop by more.
reply by GoWiSt on 25-Jun-2024
    Your darling mama was only half right. I walk sweet, as well. :-))
    And yes, I will drop by more--and more, and more, and...
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
    LOL