The Coyote Boys
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Indebted"Story about two brothers who change their destiny.
19 total reviews
Comment from T B Botts
My word Gretchen,
you are prolific in your writing. I wish I had your energy and ability to come up with such interesting characters. This sounds like another great book in the making. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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My word Gretchen,
you are prolific in your writing. I wish I had your energy and ability to come up with such interesting characters. This sounds like another great book in the making. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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It hits in spurts, Tom. And it doesn't hit often. Lol. Thank you so much for this wonderful review and the extra six. Gretchen
Comment from jmdg1954
Gretchen.
I'm trying to catch up, I have so many posts in my message box sometimes it feels like I'm drowning.
This was a well written chapter about Huck and Dewey and daddy. I'm wondering if the rooster really get in his way.
Looking forward to the next chapters which I have to get to.
John
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Gretchen.
I'm trying to catch up, I have so many posts in my message box sometimes it feels like I'm drowning.
This was a well written chapter about Huck and Dewey and daddy. I'm wondering if the rooster really get in his way.
Looking forward to the next chapters which I have to get to.
John
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Thank you, John. I'm so glad you're going to give this new one a chance. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
This is going to be an interesting tale. I am glad you are moving on to something different. I am pleased to have caught these with big bucks intact. Moving on to next chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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This is going to be an interesting tale. I am glad you are moving on to something different. I am pleased to have caught these with big bucks intact. Moving on to next chapter.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you got some funny money as well. Thank you for the stars. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I am already riled up again the boys' hateful father. Now he's killed Ben, their will be no more babies. This father deserved to have been killed by the snake, shame that never happened, but I guess we'll be hearing a lot more about this abuser. Huck and Dewey definitely aren't in a nice place. This is going to be a fabulous story, my friend. The beginning takes you straight into the story, no dilly-dallying. Well done, my clever friend. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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I am already riled up again the boys' hateful father. Now he's killed Ben, their will be no more babies. This father deserved to have been killed by the snake, shame that never happened, but I guess we'll be hearing a lot more about this abuser. Huck and Dewey definitely aren't in a nice place. This is going to be a fabulous story, my friend. The beginning takes you straight into the story, no dilly-dallying. Well done, my clever friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 25-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you're taking a chance on another story. Gretchen
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Always, Gretchen. I just wish I could have given you a six. xx
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ahhhh! The GW Hargis touch is at its creative best once again. You've managed to draw both brothers so perfectly already, and the evil nature of their father is little short of palpable. Great, great first chapter. I know I'm going to love this novella.
Here's two teeny spags I caught in the same sentence: He*(')*s protecting*(h)*is girls from both.
Can't wait for the next chapter! xoxo
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Ahhhh! The GW Hargis touch is at its creative best once again. You've managed to draw both brothers so perfectly already, and the evil nature of their father is little short of palpable. Great, great first chapter. I know I'm going to love this novella.
Here's two teeny spags I caught in the same sentence: He*(')*s protecting*(h)*is girls from both.
Can't wait for the next chapter! xoxo
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Well, wait no more. I just posted it. I'm glad you are gong to join this story. Matthew Strait, Huck and Dewey's father is nothing short of a monster. I really appreciate this nice review and the extra star. Gretchen
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Wonderful!! I'll go read it and review! (Unless it deserves a six, in which case I might wait until next Sunday, because impulsive me is out already!!!) The reason my students love me is because I have their same lack of impulse control.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Yay! A new book and I'm already hooked. Excellent first chapter of The Coyote Boys book.
The father sounds like an evil asshole
The characters are interesting and the plot is engaging.
Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
"Huck falls in love with a young black woman and this affection puts a target on her by his (fathe)? *father* maybe it's part of an accent.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Yay! A new book and I'm already hooked. Excellent first chapter of The Coyote Boys book.
The father sounds like an evil asshole
The characters are interesting and the plot is engaging.
Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
"Huck falls in love with a young black woman and this affection puts a target on her by his (fathe)? *father* maybe it's part of an accent.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much, Gypsy. This one is going to be dark. Thankfully, it isn't too long. I find when I dwell on a dark story, my anxiety doubles. And thank you for the edits. I ran out of characters to use in the description. Thank you so much for the six. Gretchen
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You are welcome. You are off a great start.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Huck's daddy certainly has badness in him as he seems to like killing things. What he has done to his son is horrible, but Huck and their mom are there to love Dewey. I am interested in seeing what comes next. There is one sentence you need to fix: He('s) protecting (his) girls.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Huck's daddy certainly has badness in him as he seems to like killing things. What he has done to his son is horrible, but Huck and their mom are there to love Dewey. I am interested in seeing what comes next. There is one sentence you need to fix: He('s) protecting (his) girls.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Carol. I appreciate your input and the edit. Gretchen
Comment from Sanku
I would like to know more about How Dewey became dim. He too like Ben got in Daddy's way? What a father (what a gory scene!).I can sense the darkness in this .Looking forward to reading more
(I think you can do a bit of editing..)
Short length is better .I think more people would read..
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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I would like to know more about How Dewey became dim. He too like Ben got in Daddy's way? What a father (what a gory scene!).I can sense the darkness in this .Looking forward to reading more
(I think you can do a bit of editing..)
Short length is better .I think more people would read..
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Dewey got hit in the head with a shovel by his father. Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
It sounds like another interesting read! I am looking forward to more, including a bit of the backstory behind Dewey getting hit over the head because of Huck.
Wendy
Edits: Two brother(s), Huck and Dewy (Dewey), live with their long suffering mother and their abusive tyrannical father. Huck falls in love with a young black woman and this affection puts a target on her by his fathe (father)(.)
That dang fox is after the girl;s (girls)
Hes (He's) protecting is (his) girls from both.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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It sounds like another interesting read! I am looking forward to more, including a bit of the backstory behind Dewey getting hit over the head because of Huck.
Wendy
Edits: Two brother(s), Huck and Dewy (Dewey), live with their long suffering mother and their abusive tyrannical father. Huck falls in love with a young black woman and this affection puts a target on her by his fathe (father)(.)
That dang fox is after the girl;s (girls)
Hes (He's) protecting is (his) girls from both.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Thank you for this wonderful review and the edits. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Dewey is good. Mom did not protect her boys. Huck is Good. Daddy is bad. So far I follow. Lots of wiggle room for stuff to happen. You didn't give us a year. I would guess no older than 1950 or so. How am I doing? I want more. :-) Karen
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Dewey is good. Mom did not protect her boys. Huck is Good. Daddy is bad. So far I follow. Lots of wiggle room for stuff to happen. You didn't give us a year. I would guess no older than 1950 or so. How am I doing? I want more. :-) Karen
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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You are right in the ballpark. I don't specify a year because I want the reader to see what they want. Lots will happen. Gretchen
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I have no doubt a lot will be going on. I am glad I didn't miss the start. Karen