The Coyote Boys
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Fishing"Story about two brothers who change their destiny.
17 total reviews
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
I can see trouble brewing. How old is Huck? Of course age doesn't matter when it comes to the issue of love I suppose. I've had many a crush on an older woman when I was a young lad- all to no avail of course. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
I can see trouble brewing. How old is Huck? Of course age doesn't matter when it comes to the issue of love I suppose. I've had many a crush on an older woman when I was a young lad- all to no avail of course. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Huck is sixteen. Dewey a year or so older. I would think Miss Lynn is in her late twenties or early thirties. She is nice to Huck and makes him feel special and that's all it takes sometimes. Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A Great character development of Dewey and Huck and dialog.
Miss Lynn sounds like a very pretty and kind lady.
Their father sounds like a horrible racist.
The Coyote Boys book is another well written story. I can't wait for the next one.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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A Great character development of Dewey and Huck and dialog.
Miss Lynn sounds like a very pretty and kind lady.
Their father sounds like a horrible racist.
The Coyote Boys book is another well written story. I can't wait for the next one.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much. I like posting rapid fire but it's tough sometimes. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You do have a lot of writing up at Fanstory and I am slow getting reviewing done. I hope Huck doesn't set his heart of Miss Lynn because his father will be a real problem. That man might even hurt the girl.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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You do have a lot of writing up at Fanstory and I am slow getting reviewing done. I hope Huck doesn't set his heart of Miss Lynn because his father will be a real problem. That man might even hurt the girl.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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His father is definitely going to be a problem, but not the only problem. Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Huck is feeling those first stirrings within himself, these crushes are something one has when young, they pass with time, when one understands them, it depends on the boy I guess, most of the time, preoccupation with sport as with me helps, well done Gretchen, love your stories, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Huck is feeling those first stirrings within himself, these crushes are something one has when young, they pass with time, when one understands them, it depends on the boy I guess, most of the time, preoccupation with sport as with me helps, well done Gretchen, love your stories, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Thank you. I think Huck fell in love with her kindness. She's never judged him. Thank you for this. Gretchen
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Isn?t that wonderful? Yes, your idealism is similar to mine.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very sweet and very well written chapter you have penned. You used great descriptive words and great imagery with your words. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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This is a very sweet and very well written chapter you have penned. You used great descriptive words and great imagery with your words. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much, Teri. Your kind words are much appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Did I miss something? Isn't Miss Lynn married or did I just assume she is? I really like this story, a lot. You're doing a great job with this.
I crouch down next to the little boy. (I crouch beside the little boy.)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Did I miss something? Isn't Miss Lynn married or did I just assume she is? I really like this story, a lot. You're doing a great job with this.
I crouch down next to the little boy. (I crouch beside the little boy.)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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She was married. He husband is no longer in the picture. Thank you for the kind words and edits. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Now I'm worried about Huck, I'm sure his dad will find out, and then all hell will be let loose. Poor Dewey, he can't help it, his father is a nut case, and should be locked up. But, I can see Dewey talking about it. I don't know what year this was set in, that could make a difference to the attitude of white's and blacks. This was another great chapter, Gretchen, I'm looking forward to the next one. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Now I'm worried about Huck, I'm sure his dad will find out, and then all hell will be let loose. Poor Dewey, he can't help it, his father is a nut case, and should be locked up. But, I can see Dewey talking about it. I don't know what year this was set in, that could make a difference to the attitude of white's and blacks. This was another great chapter, Gretchen, I'm looking forward to the next one. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Let's put it this way. It's after 1945 but before 1960. Before civil rights. Not a good time to be black. Thank you for this wonderfully detailed review. Gretchen
Comment from Sanku
Huck is going through that in between phase -Dewey teasing him about it very cute. At least the boys did a good job of catching a huge fish...I am keen to read the next..
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Huck is going through that in between phase -Dewey teasing him about it very cute. At least the boys did a good job of catching a huge fish...I am keen to read the next..
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much. Brothers love to tease. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
I expect Dewey will inadvertently let the father know about Huck's infatuation with Miss Lynn. This may trigger a showdown with his violent dad. You are excellent at making your characters real and relatable. Looking forward to more. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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I expect Dewey will inadvertently let the father know about Huck's infatuation with Miss Lynn. This may trigger a showdown with his violent dad. You are excellent at making your characters real and relatable. Looking forward to more. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. Unfortunately, Huck's father is about the worse. But every story needs a villain and Matthew Strait is villain enough for two stories. Appreciate this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
I can imagine trouble is going to errupt when Huck father sees his son is interested in a color woman. Huck does seem to be extremely smart although the story is told through his eyes. I known people like those in this story.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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I can imagine trouble is going to errupt when Huck father sees his son is interested in a color woman. Huck does seem to be extremely smart although the story is told through his eyes. I known people like those in this story.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Huck is intuitive but not book smart. His father would attack anything Huck loves. No joy around the father. Thank you so much. Gretchen