Ol' Silver and Red
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Ol' Silver and Red"Medeival Ohmie and the dragon Ol' Silver and Red
8 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Good grief Herbert! Lighthearted? Mentioning old screen stars serendipitously is one thing; having dragons crashing through castles willy-nilly is another.
And having kings lop off body parts for no sensible reason is no lesson to impart to kiddos. It is a romp for sure. And it is well written. But fantasy is not a category I read much. You are talented at it, but it is not for me. Karen
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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Good grief Herbert! Lighthearted? Mentioning old screen stars serendipitously is one thing; having dragons crashing through castles willy-nilly is another.
And having kings lop off body parts for no sensible reason is no lesson to impart to kiddos. It is a romp for sure. And it is well written. But fantasy is not a category I read much. You are talented at it, but it is not for me. Karen
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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no sensible reason???????????? He 'touched' the King!!!!!
smiley face here
Thank you for your very kind review. And I understand completely. I struggle mightily reviewing poetry, the few times I force myself.
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Okay, I will try again. You humbled me. :-(
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a fun story for Ohmie, although you might make him a very bright and sophisticated seventeen. A bosoming 15-year-old Princess May sounds about perfect for the YA set. Why would there not be a scar on his finger in a week? Can he do magic?
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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This is a fun story for Ohmie, although you might make him a very bright and sophisticated seventeen. A bosoming 15-year-old Princess May sounds about perfect for the YA set. Why would there not be a scar on his finger in a week? Can he do magic?
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your very kind review.
I think that they were concerned that natural healing would not make a sufficient scar to satisfy the king.
15/19 was acceptable in those days (smiley face here). Plus, there will be no kissing or touching in this story. (another smiley face here)
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I know the age difference acceptable in earlier days was that, but YA, which is usually under 18 see 19 as "they should be grown up by now". Although I like your stories really well and I haven't seen 19 for many decades.
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I know the age difference acceptable in earlier days was that, but YA, which is usually under 18 see 19 as "they should be grown up by now". Although I like your stories really well and I haven't seen 19 for many decades.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I have no idea what young adult readers prefer these days, so I won't be the best judge of this series. Did you say you have grandkids? I wonder if they could be test readers?
Perhaps kings and queens and princesses and kindly young men with word boxes would still hold some entertainment value for these young readers.
I read that you have two books coming out for Kindle - good luck with your sales. I would remind people every time you post. I've never owned a Kindle.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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I have no idea what young adult readers prefer these days, so I won't be the best judge of this series. Did you say you have grandkids? I wonder if they could be test readers?
Perhaps kings and queens and princesses and kindly young men with word boxes would still hold some entertainment value for these young readers.
I read that you have two books coming out for Kindle - good luck with your sales. I would remind people every time you post. I've never owned a Kindle.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your great review.
Can you believe that my grandkids have never been readers-for-entertainment? (ages 17,19,22,24)
The two Kindle books are now in paperback (Ohmie to the Rescue Vols. 1 & 2)
Comment from lyenochka
Oh - I can share where you can get much better dragon pictures. It's that game I play with my grandchildren - flightrising.com
This is a cute story and I think it would appeal to everyone who likes fantasy. Good that Ohmie didn't lose a finger or his head!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Oh - I can share where you can get much better dragon pictures. It's that game I play with my grandchildren - flightrising.com
This is a cute story and I think it would appeal to everyone who likes fantasy. Good that Ohmie didn't lose a finger or his head!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much.
I'll go search for a better picture. Thanks.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nice job again! The introduction of the dragon crashing into the castle immediately grabbed my attention! You do a great job of creating a sense of chaos and urgency. The relationship between Ohmie and Princess May is so enjoyable to read.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Nice job again! The introduction of the dragon crashing into the castle immediately grabbed my attention! You do a great job of creating a sense of chaos and urgency. The relationship between Ohmie and Princess May is so enjoyable to read.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate your very nice review.
Comment from Teri7
Wayne, This is a very well written story about Ohmie, the King and May. You used very good descriptive words and very good dialogue. A very enjoyable read my friend. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Wayne, This is a very well written story about Ohmie, the King and May. You used very good descriptive words and very good dialogue. A very enjoyable read my friend. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you. I truly appreciate your very nice review.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Wayne. I hope you are well
Your story is well written. I did not see any glaring errors and I found it entertaining. Although I always have trouble with these period pieces, especially when they're fantasies.
It sounds like all Ohmie very nearly lost his head and he did lose a finger. Maybe the princess should've told the king that they were exercising that way
What are YA's? You mentioned these in your notes, but I see no reference to them in the story. Maybe in a previous chapter?
Here. I think it is awkward where it says than their own pleasure. It makes it seem like it's an either or. Either they cause her ruin or they have their own pleasure But they can do both
" when confronted with those more intent on her ruin than their own pleasure. "
Here did you mean May?
" led to places even Mayh had yet to discover."
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Hi, Wayne. I hope you are well
Your story is well written. I did not see any glaring errors and I found it entertaining. Although I always have trouble with these period pieces, especially when they're fantasies.
It sounds like all Ohmie very nearly lost his head and he did lose a finger. Maybe the princess should've told the king that they were exercising that way
What are YA's? You mentioned these in your notes, but I see no reference to them in the story. Maybe in a previous chapter?
Here. I think it is awkward where it says than their own pleasure. It makes it seem like it's an either or. Either they cause her ruin or they have their own pleasure But they can do both
" when confronted with those more intent on her ruin than their own pleasure. "
Here did you mean May?
" led to places even Mayh had yet to discover."
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your very nice review. And for the catches.
YA - Young Adult
Comment from jim vecchio
Another very entertaining episode for Ohmie's unconventional life. I was hoping the dragon would have reappeared or played a larger part. The cats seemed a larger threat. Keep up these imaginative episodes!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Another very entertaining episode for Ohmie's unconventional life. I was hoping the dragon would have reappeared or played a larger part. The cats seemed a larger threat. Keep up these imaginative episodes!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Oh, don't worry. Ol' Silver and Red is the star of the show.
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Looking forward to Chapter 2!
