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Comment from Ric Myworld
Looks like I've been missing all of your best stuff. Congratulations on yet another blue ribbon contest winner. And I'm so sorry that I didn't catch all of these great posts when they were up. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Looks like I've been missing all of your best stuff. Congratulations on yet another blue ribbon contest winner. And I'm so sorry that I didn't catch all of these great posts when they were up. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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I was laughing the whole time I wrote this. While I was in Limbo my muse was in overdrive. It kept me busy. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from BermyBye50
Karen,
Congrats on your win in the Out of Order Contest. A compelling story with dire consequences. You kept this reader captivated as to the eventual outcome of the theft of the Out of Order sign from the start to the inevitable one small step finish of this exceptional story.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Karen,
Congrats on your win in the Out of Order Contest. A compelling story with dire consequences. You kept this reader captivated as to the eventual outcome of the theft of the Out of Order sign from the start to the inevitable one small step finish of this exceptional story.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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She never saw that she was that selfish person she kept talking about. :-)
Comment from Lori Mulligan
I'm an entry in this contest too but hats off to ya--great story. I loved it! Very funny and the ending was quite a surprise. I loved how many examples you came up with that could be out of order. Great job! Good luck!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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I'm an entry in this contest too but hats off to ya--great story. I loved it! Very funny and the ending was quite a surprise. I loved how many examples you came up with that could be out of order. Great job! Good luck!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the six. Good luck with the contest. I had a fun time with it. She was a totally self absorbent person, who only saw that in others.
I have known people like that.
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Yes, I loved that about your story!
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I won first place!!!!! I was not expecting that when I checked I only had one vote! yippie! Brag Brag Brag. Did you win number 2 ? Thanks for voting. I wish more people did. The more folks that vote, the fairer the contest. Have a great day. Karen
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Congratulations!!! Well deserved. I came in third with Holding It on I95. Hope to see you in another one! Lori
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Congrats. I will go back and read it again. Karen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Haha! Well deserved! I must admit I didn't know where this was going but what an excellent and unexpected ending. Beautifully clearly presented and expressed and a pleasure to read! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Haha! Well deserved! I must admit I didn't know where this was going but what an excellent and unexpected ending. Beautifully clearly presented and expressed and a pleasure to read! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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It cracked me up as I wrote it. This self involved creature was expounding on the selfishness of others. I have met her many times in my life. I gave her, her comeuppance, or was that her comedownance? hahaha Wait until you read my next one ! It will knock your socks off!
Comment from Esther Brown
Great story. Loved it. Two fixes : it securely snuggled in my big purse, it wherever I went needs adjusting. The other one is breakfast this morning should be that morning as was 5 months ago. Good luck.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Great story. Loved it. Two fixes : it securely snuggled in my big purse, it wherever I went needs adjusting. The other one is breakfast this morning should be that morning as was 5 months ago. Good luck.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Edited and I thank you. I don't know how I missed it. I appreciate your eagle eye. Thanks for the read.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
If this doesn't win it should be in contention. Well done, and somewhat ironic was the part ... to use the last empty computer for my paper on "Giving to Others."
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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If this doesn't win it should be in contention. Well done, and somewhat ironic was the part ... to use the last empty computer for my paper on "Giving to Others."
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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I cracked myself up with her paper's title!
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I reviewed it again trying to decipher the 'paper's title' in your response to my review when... I spooted a faux pas with your close which read there was nothing wrong with the elevator that I missed originally. There had to be. Otherwise it would have been there.
:-O
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Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Lol. Yes, to answer your question...it is snarky enough. Lol. Check your second sent though. There's some extra words there I believe. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Lol. Yes, to answer your question...it is snarky enough. Lol. Check your second sent though. There's some extra words there I believe. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I edited thank you. Wait until you read "Lorelei". I amaze myself lately, I just keep writing. Store up, I will down for a while from the 18th until the end of the month probably. unpacking and nesting.:-)
Comment from samantha0930
I like your story. It's a fun idea for them to use a fake out of order sign so they can hog everything for themself, and then complain about other people being selfish, while they themself is being selfish, but they don't realize it. It's a good use of the contest prompt for something being out of order. The ending is really good too ;) I didn't give it 5 stars because there's a lot of little mistakes, like spaces in the wrong place and word choice that is confusing that could be fixed. For some reason the picture doesn't show up for me, but that's probably just something wrong with the website not showing it properly? Idk if that's something you could fix; I feel like that's out of your control.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I like your story. It's a fun idea for them to use a fake out of order sign so they can hog everything for themself, and then complain about other people being selfish, while they themself is being selfish, but they don't realize it. It's a good use of the contest prompt for something being out of order. The ending is really good too ;) I didn't give it 5 stars because there's a lot of little mistakes, like spaces in the wrong place and word choice that is confusing that could be fixed. For some reason the picture doesn't show up for me, but that's probably just something wrong with the website not showing it properly? Idk if that's something you could fix; I feel like that's out of your control.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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No one else mentioned having trouble with the picture. Ask Tom about it. If you tell me which things need to be corrected, I will edit them. I have a spell and grammar check in Word and use Grammarly as well. However, things can get by. This site removes and adds spaces willy-nilly. Thanks for the read
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I went back and looked at my story, and the picture was indeed gone. I had to select another.
While I was there, I eagle-eyed the story, made a few corrections and ran the grammar program again. I hope I got everything. Thanks for the heads up.
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You're welcome :)
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Comment from Earl Corp
I like the twist at the end where your very unlikeable character got their just desserts. Kudos for developing a character so despicable that they cheered at the conclusion. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I like the twist at the end where your very unlikeable character got their just desserts. Kudos for developing a character so despicable that they cheered at the conclusion. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Are you from Texas too? I made her up and even I wanted to get behind her and push. I will read something of yours. I read one for one. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Lindsey Russell
This is a very different story than the ones I've previously seen entered into this contest and I absolutely love it! It's such a different twist and the ending made me so surprised I laughed a little. Great job and good luck.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This is a very different story than the ones I've previously seen entered into this contest and I absolutely love it! It's such a different twist and the ending made me so surprised I laughed a little. Great job and good luck.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I've never seen you before. I appreciate the read.
I will look for something of yours to read, I read one for one.