Sweet Mary Makes up Her Mind
The breezes give advice.15 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
HI Verna,
I like the metaphor and personification of the garden. All the way through the poem I was thinking something similar to your last line. It is always good advice to follow. Jimmy definitely showed his love and would make the best husband for her.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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HI Verna,
I like the metaphor and personification of the garden. All the way through the poem I was thinking something similar to your last line. It is always good advice to follow. Jimmy definitely showed his love and would make the best husband for her.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Joan, for a lovely review. Reading it was a good way to start my day. I hope you have a great day.
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You're welcome, Verna.
Joan
Comment from Samantha Wymer
Congrats on winning second place in the free verse poem contest. In my opinion you should have been the first place winner for such an remarkable poem. This is the first I have read of your writing and look forward to reading more of your poems. Excellent Job.
Much love, Sam
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Congrats on winning second place in the free verse poem contest. In my opinion you should have been the first place winner for such an remarkable poem. This is the first I have read of your writing and look forward to reading more of your poems. Excellent Job.
Much love, Sam
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Sam, for your wonderful review and the 6 and for following me. That cheers my heart!
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Your welcome
Comment from Loren .
Hi, Verna. First let me say I love the last stanza of your poem. : ). And secondly, congratulations on your placement in the contest.
And lastly, didn't you once contribute to Faith Writers? I seem to remember your name and some of your writings way back when. If this isn't you, no worries as I enjoyed your poem regardless. Take care and Gods bless and congratulations again. Loren
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Hi, Verna. First let me say I love the last stanza of your poem. : ). And secondly, congratulations on your placement in the contest.
And lastly, didn't you once contribute to Faith Writers? I seem to remember your name and some of your writings way back when. If this isn't you, no worries as I enjoyed your poem regardless. Take care and Gods bless and congratulations again. Loren
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Thank you so very much for your gracious review. Yes, you have the right Verna Mitchell (I usually use my maiden name in the middle for writing-for the benefit if those who knew "Verna Cole." Indeed, I have been writing for Faith Writers for a very long time . . . and I still do. I post sometimes when I write one there. I had so many from FW that an editor friend persuaded me to publish them in books of poetry-which I did. So I have lots of past and present writing to post when I can review enough or win some flex dollars to post.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Amen!!! I think Mary understood the best choice. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading this story in a poem. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Amen!!! I think Mary understood the best choice. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading this story in a poem. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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thank you very much, Barbara, for an excellent review. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from karenina
It seems half of all posts I've read today have had a myriad of issues with Advanced Editor, formatting etc...
Don't sweat the small stuff!
Your free verse is very well written, and I quite agree with the final lines!
The problem with castles in the air? No foundation!
Jimmy doesn't talk ...he shows!
Karenina
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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It seems half of all posts I've read today have had a myriad of issues with Advanced Editor, formatting etc...
Don't sweat the small stuff!
Your free verse is very well written, and I quite agree with the final lines!
The problem with castles in the air? No foundation!
Jimmy doesn't talk ...he shows!
Karenina
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you, dear, for your insightful review. We had to be careful not to be taken in by the "pretty, sweet-talking boys."
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I vaguely remember the "type" -- although it has been five + decades!
Comment from Begin Again
The proof is in the pudding....actions speak louder than words. Your story in a poem says it all. Well done! Thank you for sharing.
As for the spacing, the entire site has been having fits. Hopefully it fixes itself soon.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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The proof is in the pudding....actions speak louder than words. Your story in a poem says it all. Well done! Thank you for sharing.
As for the spacing, the entire site has been having fits. Hopefully it fixes itself soon.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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thank you, Carol, for an excellent review. I appreciate it.
Comment from lyenochka
I'm sorry that the spacing didn't work out. Many had this problem last week but I thought it was fixed. Maybe if you close down Fanstory and log back it, it will use the most current software update.
Loved your story poem and Mary is very wise to choose the man who shows his love than a man who makes lots of verbal promises!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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I'm sorry that the spacing didn't work out. Many had this problem last week but I thought it was fixed. Maybe if you close down Fanstory and log back it, it will use the most current software update.
Loved your story poem and Mary is very wise to choose the man who shows his love than a man who makes lots of verbal promises!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much for your great review and for understanding the glitch in spacing. I'll try what you suggested.
Comment from Wendy G
Beautiful and wise poem. Yes, words and promises need to be followed up with actions, and the quiet Jimmy would give her the love she desired by showing it in action, and with time would follow it through with words. Very thoughtfully and well written. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Beautiful and wise poem. Yes, words and promises need to be followed up with actions, and the quiet Jimmy would give her the love she desired by showing it in action, and with time would follow it through with words. Very thoughtfully and well written. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Wendy, for your excellent review and wise words.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Verna,
A splendid poem I wish I would have read forty years ago when I was young and looking for love.
I hope Mary listens to the wind!
Exceptional use of flowers as symbolism.
Best wishes, Verna,
Cindy
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Verna,
A splendid poem I wish I would have read forty years ago when I was young and looking for love.
I hope Mary listens to the wind!
Exceptional use of flowers as symbolism.
Best wishes, Verna,
Cindy
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much, Cindy, for your great review. You're always an encouragement to me. Before I got married, my dad told me he was a big concerned that I would think marriage was a grand romantic venture all the time. At 20, that's just what I thought, till I started teaching school, keeping house, and I got pregnant, all before I was 21 three months later. I found out about life in a hurry, but it did work-not just the way I thought it would. In August we'll celebrate 66 years together. He's still my best thought of romance.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nicely written free verse poem and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful weekend and may God bless you and keep you safe. Patricia.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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This is a very nicely written free verse poem and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful weekend and may God bless you and keep you safe. Patricia.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Patricia. I appreciate the review and the blessing wishes. Sending those right back to you!