Unfinished Brushstrokes
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Comment from BOO ghost
Love the picture that resembles an oil painting, At the corner stool sat a man hunched over the counter, his shoulders slumped in defeat. His once neatly combed hair fell in disarray over his forehead, partially obscuring his bloodshot eyes. A five o'clock shadow roughened his jaw, and the creases in his brow told the tale of a sleepless night. His hand trembled as he swirled the last drops of amber liquor around the glass.Good description! "Listen, lady, you look like my sister, but you can't be. She's dead. And I refuse to believe I am talking to a ghost." But it is her! A ghost, I like the letter! He give the necklace back? A lot going on! I might have to backtrack a few chapters. Good IMAGINATION! Nice dialogue. That ghost gets around! Love letter?
BOO!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Love the picture that resembles an oil painting, At the corner stool sat a man hunched over the counter, his shoulders slumped in defeat. His once neatly combed hair fell in disarray over his forehead, partially obscuring his bloodshot eyes. A five o'clock shadow roughened his jaw, and the creases in his brow told the tale of a sleepless night. His hand trembled as he swirled the last drops of amber liquor around the glass.Good description! "Listen, lady, you look like my sister, but you can't be. She's dead. And I refuse to believe I am talking to a ghost." But it is her! A ghost, I like the letter! He give the necklace back? A lot going on! I might have to backtrack a few chapters. Good IMAGINATION! Nice dialogue. That ghost gets around! Love letter?
BOO!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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If you ever have time I would love to hear what you think of the story development from start to finish. Like I said, I am new at writing ghosts and my style isn't about gore. I just love to write and keep you guessing.
Thank you again.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
It's such a beautiful story Carol. You have thought it out so very well. I'm sorry that I'm so behind with everything, but I have a few upsetting days. I'm hoping to catch up as much as I can. I'm sure you have a winner here. Hugs, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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It's such a beautiful story Carol. You have thought it out so very well. I'm sorry that I'm so behind with everything, but I have a few upsetting days. I'm hoping to catch up as much as I can. I'm sure you have a winner here. Hugs, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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My heart and my love goes out to you Ulla. Just read when you can and enjoy it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
I love that Eleanor pops in an out in an effort to help her family members become successful enough to inherit the provisional money she left for them. In this chapter, Nick is the surprise. What debt does he have with the judge? Nick negotiated the million-dollar payoff for himself.
Oh My! There are plots and sub-plots. How on earth will you unravel all of this? I can't wait to see.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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I love that Eleanor pops in an out in an effort to help her family members become successful enough to inherit the provisional money she left for them. In this chapter, Nick is the surprise. What debt does he have with the judge? Nick negotiated the million-dollar payoff for himself.
Oh My! There are plots and sub-plots. How on earth will you unravel all of this? I can't wait to see.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Yes, I have to try and keep them all straight and being away for a few days mixed up my mind on how it is suppose to unravel. Wish me luck.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Esther Brown
Another virtual six my friend. Nothing to edit that I see. I heard you went through a tornado? Fan story has its own rumor mill I see. Nothing to edit, great story and I will see you again Monday night when I get back from another Harley riding vacation. Esther
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Another virtual six my friend. Nothing to edit that I see. I heard you went through a tornado? Fan story has its own rumor mill I see. Nothing to edit, great story and I will see you again Monday night when I get back from another Harley riding vacation. Esther
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Off to the wild blue yonder are you? Hope you have a nice time. I am just happy to be back and able to write again. I was going crazy.
Smiles, Carol
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I bet. I love sitting down at the computer and letting my imagination wander. Truthfully, my best thinking happens on the back of the bike. But I can't always hold the thought long enough to write it. Esther
Comment from prettybluebirds
This story surpasses the previous ghost story. It takes the reader into each character's mind and world. I'm enjoying this story very much, and waiting for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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This story surpasses the previous ghost story. It takes the reader into each character's mind and world. I'm enjoying this story very much, and waiting for the next chapter.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Do you really think this one is better? I feel more relaxed writing this one and it's awesome to have fun with Eleanor.
Smiles and a great big thank you. Carol
Comment from BethShelby
I'm wondering where Margaret will get a millon dollars because I didn't think they were supposed to get the money without doing some important thing. I hope Jonathan is truly going to make a change in his life. Trevor and Megan are the ones in the most trouble it seems at the moment.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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I'm wondering where Margaret will get a millon dollars because I didn't think they were supposed to get the money without doing some important thing. I hope Jonathan is truly going to make a change in his life. Trevor and Megan are the ones in the most trouble it seems at the moment.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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You will just have to keep wondering until you actually find out. LOL but you'll know soon.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Eighteen red spaces, eighteen black spaces, and two green spaces. Well, unless you're in Europe, then there is only one green space. And no, I never play, but for the occasional $25 chip on the black 8, in passing. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Eighteen red spaces, eighteen black spaces, and two green spaces. Well, unless you're in Europe, then there is only one green space. And no, I never play, but for the occasional $25 chip on the black 8, in passing. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Couldn't all use an Eleanor just once at the casino...Me either...25 cent slots would be my limit. Thanks as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from tfawcus
If you could lend me Eleanor for a couple of days, I might try my luck at the Adelaide Casino! LOL
Once again, I'm touched by the relationship between Eleanor and Helen, and the care they both extend to Jenna.
Keep up the good work! (Ooops! I don't think I've written that since I was a schoolmaster!)
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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If you could lend me Eleanor for a couple of days, I might try my luck at the Adelaide Casino! LOL
Once again, I'm touched by the relationship between Eleanor and Helen, and the care they both extend to Jenna.
Keep up the good work! (Ooops! I don't think I've written that since I was a schoolmaster!)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much. I think we all would like to have a night out with Eleanor at the casino. I appreciate your kindness and thoughts on the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
This is my favorite chapter, thus far. Something about the tenderness with which Eleanor confronted Jonathan about his gambling addiction.
She's a many faceted ghost! Sly, an imp, a bit of a sleuth...but she loves her dysfunctional family and is "meddling" in the best possible way!
Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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This is my favorite chapter, thus far. Something about the tenderness with which Eleanor confronted Jonathan about his gambling addiction.
She's a many faceted ghost! Sly, an imp, a bit of a sleuth...but she loves her dysfunctional family and is "meddling" in the best possible way!
Karenina
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Eleanor couldn't reach out to her family when she was alive so she remained a secretive reclue except for Jenna. Now it is her time to leave them with the knowledge that she cared very much for all of them.
Smiles, Carol
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She's firm but loving...too bad her family didn't appreciate her when she was among them!
Comment from royowen
I love Eleanor's meeting with her brother Jonathon completely under the bondage to drinking and gambling, both of which God Delivered me from alcohol and gambling, it's been 41 years now, a wonderful post, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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I love Eleanor's meeting with her brother Jonathon completely under the bondage to drinking and gambling, both of which God Delivered me from alcohol and gambling, it's been 41 years now, a wonderful post, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Awesome, Roy! I think God works in mysterious ways and for Jonathan it was through Eleanor. With her reminding him, he'll see how he can be a better person and help others at the same time.
Smiles, Carol
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I agree